Close your eyes

Close your eyes

A Poem by Amina.

Close your eyes
so you hear
the beauty
in his voice.

Let the butterflies
of love
surround you
at night.

Drop the sword
you're holding,
and surrender.
You're safe now

inside his arms
you breathe
in and out.
The air of roses

touches your hair,
and you smile.


But you open
your eyes,
and it's gone;
The dream of immortality.

At night
you dream
about butterflies
and roses.

You long for
safe arms,
but it's to late.
You've opened your eyes

and the dream was gone.
Reality awaits
with disillusion.
Why did you open your eyes?


"To see who was my prince."

© 2009 Amina.


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ending with a question produces a wonderous array of epiphany of thought..........Lovely, Sabine*

Posted 15 Years Ago


no wonder the best things happen when eyes are closed.........dreams, tears, hugs, kisses and prayer!! :) lovely poem gal...

Regards,
Poetic Soul

Posted 15 Years Ago


"Drop the sword you're holding, and surrender"
Is quite a good line, made me wish I wrote it.
Enjoyable to read.

Posted 15 Years Ago


great poem. most of the stuff i write is depressing so yea. its good to read something happier.
great work. keep writing.

Posted 15 Years Ago


A very beautiful poem. I look forward to reading more of your work


~Revenant

Posted 15 Years Ago


I think that this is a very beautiful poem about longing, especially longing for a perfect love that one has not yet met, or may not ever meet.

I'm just not sure about the line, "the dream of immortality". I'm not sure it fits with the rest of the poem.

Posted 15 Years Ago


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I love this, and your style of writing ^^

Posted 15 Years Ago


I loved this, it shows the beauty of a partner and what they can provide for you. Your description is also so very creative. Great piece.

Posted 15 Years Ago


I gather from this that you dream of a man who you love, but in the end when you wake up thats all it is. or perhaps it is someone who is real and you have feelings for. Either way, I like this poem.

Posted 15 Years Ago


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Amina.
Amina.

Belgium



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Hello there! My name is Amina and I am 17 years old. I've been writing ever since I was 7 years old. I love to write - and read - fantasy. Currently I'm working on a new story, and I have a number of.. more..

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