Close your eyes

Close your eyes
so you hear
the beauty
in his voice.

Let the butterflies
of love
surround you
at night.

Drop the sword
you're holding,
and surrender.
You're safe now

inside his arms
you breathe
in and out.
The air of roses

touches your hair,
and you smile.


But you open
your eyes,
and it's gone;
The dream of immortality.

At night
you dream
about butterflies
and roses.

You long for
safe arms,
but it's to late.
You've opened your eyes

and the dream was gone.
Reality awaits
with disillusion.
Why did you open your eyes?


"To see who was my prince."

Reviews

[Sabine]

ending with a question produces a wonderous array of epiphany of thought..........Lovely, Sabine*

[poetic soul]

no wonder the best things happen when eyes are closed.........dreams, tears, hugs, kisses and prayer!! :) lovely poem gal...

Regards,
Poetic Soul

[Sorry Infamous]

"Drop the sword you're holding, and surrender"
Is quite a good line, made me wish I wrote it.
Enjoyable to read.

[Michael Kerr]

great poem. most of the stuff i write is depressing so yea. its good to read something happier.
great work. keep writing.

[revenant21]

A very beautiful poem. I look forward to reading more of your work


~Revenant

[Suzanne Sherif]

I think that this is a very beautiful poem about longing, especially longing for a perfect love that one has not yet met, or may not ever meet.

I'm just not sure about the line, "the dream of immortality". I'm not sure it fits with the rest of the poem.

[Aly]

I love this, and your style of writing ^^

[Dimples87]

I loved this, it shows the beauty of a partner and what they can provide for you. Your description is also so very creative. Great piece.

[Dekadin]

I gather from this that you dream of a man who you love, but in the end when you wake up thats all it is. or perhaps it is someone who is real and you have feelings for. Either way, I like this poem.