Winter

A short poem written in class on a cold winter day...

A castle of ice and snow

Rivers that do not flow

Dead trees are now covered with white

The colder it gets the sooner it turns to night

Winds howl as they turn and twist

taking the land into its' frozen fist

No creatures of the forest can be heard

"We must stay warm," is what they have learned

In this element that shakes the earth to its' core

My world stays frozen and cold forever more

Author's Note

Criticism is greatly appreciated!

Reviews

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Ooh, I really like this poem. Wonderful imagery. Awesome write!!!

Heather

[Lady Of Darkness]

I Like your descriptions on winter.
It flowed very nicely.

[Vatsayayana]

Hmmm... I'd like to see more of this. Thinking of expanding upon it??? :-)
It's very simple. Your description is flawless. If you drew upon too much imagery here, the reader would be lost. Ice in its most basic, frozen state.

[Richard McLin]

I usually really hate poems that rhyme. It just seems like it's the easy way out. But I don't feel that way with your piece. Your piece actually has something to say, and a story that I actually find very captiviating. This is a really good piece.

Richard.

[Kellius the Genius]

Coldly ingenious.One of kind.Nice imaginery context.
Peace and Love