Gone From You

In great recollection,
my thoughts are consuming
telling me of time long passed.
In fear I hide in shadows, ever assuming
the faces of my past cannot be erased

The words of my promises
echoing in my mind
I can't forget your tears,
the pain of my heart left behind.
Swearing I would someday return to you
The words swelling on my tongue
I grew up as the distance did too
I was lost to the world

Now I am all that remains
of the man I once was
Stored in my soul,
at least this of you will not be lost
my memory drives me
though i know not where,
or what I am

All I see are my memories
carrying me through eternity
I've lost you forever
but in time, I feel
once more will we be together
At last i will feel you
Resurrected by your touch

Author's Note

I knew a boy once who would have died to keep a promise. His loyalty knew no bonds.

Reviews

[Alana McGuire]

You really have a beautiful way with words! I love writing that makes me really have to think and endugle myself completely in it to feel like I understand it; and this, this is one of those pieces for me.

"I grew up as the distance did too"
I really enjoyed the unique approach, but strong truth in comparison in that line. It hurts a lot being so close to someone, and watching your relationship with them diminish over time.

Sorry for the ramble, but I really enjoyed reading this a lot. Thank you for posting, and I look forward to reading more from you. :)

[L.M.Warde]

Thank you! I'm very glad you liked it, I spent much of my childhood looking at the ways people interact with one another and saw that in nearly every great love, there was pain. I saw so many who loved someone who could not be with them, or had to separate for some reason, that it broke my heart to witness it. I wanted to find a way to translate some of the things I'd felt while learning from them into words. By all means ramble on! I'm sure I will as well when I get to reading your work!

[Alana McGuire]

It really is a heartbreaking experience to witness. I wish it didn't have to be that way, and we could just keep everyone we love locked in our arms and not just our hearts. But life is a jerk sometimes. hahah and thank you for replying!

[L.M.Warde]

I think it is that way so that understanding can be achieved. Without pain we cannot know love, without love we can't even begin to live. And you very I'll reply. Feel free to message anytime if you just feel like talking about a subject further.

[Lisa Victoria]

You tell a beautiful yet, heartbreaking story here in just a few words.....beautifully done:)

[L.M.Warde]

Thank you very much! I'm glad you like this piece, I hope I can continue to impress you : P

[Sarah Jean]

I love this. It had my heart on a string after the first paragraph. You have such eloquent speech and it shapes your work in such a beautiful way.

[L.M.Warde]

Well thank you very much, I appreciate the compliment! Though I mainly write stories, I used to only write poetry. I only kept a few pieces here and there, most of it I either gave away or threw out because I had nothing to do with it. Thank you sincerely for reading it and I'm very thankful you enjoyed it!

[Glen Yumang Manese]

A lament... the words just really tell all with this write... I believe a couple lines need to be broken down to get a better flow with this verse:

In great recollection,
my thoughts are consuming
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I can't forget your tears,
the pain of my heart left behind.
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though i know not where,
or what I am...

for structure... the words are solid... and gives time for the reader to grasp a thought before moving forward... Just my opinion this is your work...

[L.M.Warde]

Truth be told, when I posted this I had originally made a change to the formatting that was similar to your suggestion. My power died before I could submit the alterations. When it came back on I had gotten distracted with some of my other works. I do feel as though the flow would be much better, so I will indeed change it. I really appreciate the review and your punting that out to me. Thank you!

[Angi]

I see an old man on the verge of letting go. He is thinking back on his life, his regrets. He knows. He just knows that they will be back together again. He will be resurrected from the death that was his life without her. I hope it is so! Angi~

[L.M.Warde]

That's a wonderful vision of it! Some of the people I've known had lives of deep regret for that one love that got away, that one person who made their life bright, one was someone very close to me, so I wanted to do something that could embody most of the important aspects of their view points. I hope I hope I didn't let them down. Thank you so much for the review!

[Angi]

I don't think you let them down, L.M. It was my pleasure to read this. Angi~