The Winter of Distance

A poem about how distance affects relationships

The steps of bitterness echo in the
Oncoming blizzard as autumn's leaves
Perform a wild exodus into the
Remains of a cold, unrelenting grave.

An empty embrace fills the lost
Heart of the weary traveller who
Speaks words of longing for that
Silent destination hanging out there.

Brief words, fleeting like the wind.
Stilled potraits, frozen like the frost.

The captured voice of a growing
Flame echoes like a distant storm
That grows as the illuminated waters
Crash into the dimmed embers.

The roaring fire now springs free
Like a swarm of ravenous locusts
Swirling in the storm of serenity
That brings me back to you.

Reviews

[M]

I like the use of words keep it up :)

[Luke Rawlings]

Thank you! :D

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

I honestly want to find a piece of yours that I love but i cant lol.
I'ts not your work you're a great poet. Its just not my kind of writing, i guess its because i find it hard to understand. I saw the subject this was meant to be on, so I thought i would give it a look. I don't understand how what you wrote has anything to do with relationships.
I think its just me though, because this isn't so complicated for most haha :P
I want to find something I like ill keep looking :P

[Luke Rawlings]

I do write abstract metaphors sometimes...I can paraphrase it for you if you'd like :D

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

only if your not going out of your way. ill see if i like it more like that :)

[Mizuki Tsukiakari]

-sigh- Luke, why must you add beautiful poetry with titles that attract my interest while I am in the midst of listening to Eminem? I had to pause my ipod. This piece is bresthtaking; as I attempt to choose a favorite verse, I find that I cannot. I love the entire poem. To my reading list it goes!

[Luke Rawlings]

Because Eminem is shocking, and it is always good to give your ears a rest from that garbage :') Thank you for the review :3

[Mizuki Tsukiakari]

He is explicit, and I do not care much for rap, but he is inspiring. He raps just as I write: Blurt out whatever works, even if it has no significance. Whatever comes to mind, write it.

And you are welcome :)