Crammed Inn Heroin Tales

what if the honeymooners were junkies?

He gets the Portland rains
stays in for days
getting the heroin
drip
drip
drip
well, if you have to come down
at least it drains…

smack smack smack
he feels the pain
she says,
“if you wanted to wear the pants around here,
you shoulda put your belt around your waist,
not your arm, dumb bell”

He says, “You’re going to the moon!”
Alice, his fist tightens shut
arm veers up, She gets sick, Ralph!

it’s punctured now
zoom zoom zoom
Two rocket scientists on a bus
to an outer galaxy
making candles out of themselves
dripping and melting all waxy
wane like

 

Reviews

[Steven]

Nice! I love the Honeymooners... I feel like I just came back from a surreal land, off some musky old orange couch, stained with beer and full of cigarette burn holes, the black and white visage fresh in my brain of that old sitcom... but with a twist. Perhaps one of the deleted scenes, one of the modern, true scenes of a broken marriage, held together by the glue of various abuses. I like it.

[TL Boehm]

wow. I've missed you. I'm slightly forgettable..so you probably are wondering who the hell I am, but I've been at the cafe since 2006. So...I remember you well.

[Emily B]

aw, the good ole days . . . :)

I like your work/play.

[Nairba Sirrah]

Great poem...but I was crushed there was no "Bang! Zoom!"

Looking back...it was extremely whack how often they suggested he oughta hit her...even more whack how she never even slightly flinched...perhaps you see a little gender/swap association with a certain 39th st. couple?

[Naomi Montana Walsh]

Very interesting concept.. this poem works well on many levals..I truly think you have a talent..your choice of charactors.. funny but not laugh out loud funny.. odd funny ..Ralph and Alice ..on heroin..I would have never came up with it.

[cest la vie]

Witty, very witty!! Loved reading this. Lok forward to reading more of your writes.

[alexsnow]

A nice demonstration of visual and auditory word play.

[KristylEmilia]

Enjoyable read, all the words flowed and it was very easy to visualize.

[decoraz]

this is great,

i loved this .. I can the voice of Alice C. as I was reading this.
:~]

[LJW]

lol

Now, how about if the Flinstones were crackheads?