Jonathan V

Feb. 03, 2008

Baby, I thought
That I was over you
Until I saw
His eyes of blue
Just like you
In so many ways
Lookin' at him
I swore my heart would break
Until I found
Somewhere deep, deep inside
All of the strength
The strength I need to survive
Livin this life
Without your love
And never feeling
Your sweet tender touch
But somehow
I know I'll make it through
And I pray to God
Someday He'll lead me back to you
But if He don't
I know I'll be okay
And, damn, it hurts
Livin' without you.
You know it kills me,
The way I lost you

Reviews

[Murphy]

This is very tender... feels like a wound; albeit a healing wound. And there is healing in your very words, much the same as the human body has the innate ability to heal itself (when in good health, of course). Not a very exciting review here, but that's the picture that this created in my mind... a healing wound... quite simple really. Well written... nice job. Raising a toast to emotional welll being... cheers, my friend... keep smiling :~)

[Katie]

It seems like you have somthing inside you that is in so much pain and it is like this poem is patching up somthing and saying it will move on

[Trée]

Love the pacing. Felt pulled into the pain, the loss as if tumbling down a hole we have all been in, know is there, yet still find our way back from time to time. Also love the way you end this one with "the way I lost you, which is a delicious aftertaste wanting more. Your diction and word choice make this piece feel real, not manufactured. One would think this was not just a literary exercise but a pouring forth from a heart so rendered. In other words, I liked this poem a lot. :-D