I Really Don't Know

facts and fancies

My tears are not like precious diamonds

My eyes do not sparkle with joy

My frown is only a furrow on my brow

My personality is not like a jewel

I don't often make witty comments

Very little wit is found within it

I have no large anime eyes

My mouth is nothing like a rose bud

Neither is it called generous

My white skin is not like alabaster or moon

I wasn't born with a silver spoon

My body isn't muscular, reedy or in shape

My chin is not pointy nor is it strong

My hair is far too unreasonably long

And I never know all the words to a song

I cannot usefully turn straw into gold

Nor quicken that which is icy cold

I can't pretend to be young when I'm old

I cannot hear the nightingale sing

Only a crow's call enters my ears

And sometimes there is ringing I can't explain

I am not cool, beautiful, fascinating, brilliant

I'm also not finished nor have a clue

Except maybe that's how we sail on through

Reviews

[JE Falcon]

My mother used to say, when I acted Goo-fee, that the hospital sent the wrong kid home with her. To which I always responded, "Yeah, well maybe so. But now you're stuck with me because they have a no-return policy, and I'm all you're going to get. --- Then she'd hug me, hmm, Mothers! --- hmm, life. --- This poem was exceptional, moving on a personnel level. --- Thanks!

[TamsinDaya]

This is really emotive--it feels quite raw and much more genuine for it. You have some wonderful lines in here:
'I cannot usefully turn straw into gold
Nor quicken that which is icy cold
I can't pretend to be young when I'm old"

My favourite lines are these:

"I am not cool, beautiful, fascinating, brilliant
I'm also not finished nor have a clue
Except maybe that's how we sail on through"

Thank you for sharing this.

[LJ]

The lines you chose to highlight here are favorites of mine, too - though I really didn't know it until you posted them this way. Nice! Thank you. I appreciate you.

[Chris Shaw]

Welcome to the world of normal people with all their imperfections and learn to celebrate the wonder of you.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

You are extraordinarily ordinary...which is the best way to be...separately the flaws might show, but as an entire package you are what we all wish to be...human.

j.

[LJ]

Haha - thank you kindly. It's an old piece, but felt right at the moment. I don't know whether to rework it for more focus, but may. What do you think? Thanks again.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I think sometimes we tend to overwork pieces to the point that they lose their natural quality and feel contrived.

[LJ]

That is true, and thank you again. Guess I'll leave it.

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Woah! Back into reality. As writers we often hype a lot of things but this is so cool! It's like yeah this actually keeps happening and then we really don't know... 😄. I'm happy I got to read this!

[LJ]

And I'm happy you read it and left a comment, thank you very much! I'll try to get by your work soon...