In The Dark

I hear the shots run in the dark

Nothing like the flashing of my heart

Can you feel it?

Never to escape

This hell I will incinerate

I can feel it!

Both my eyes have broken

I dance with teardrops in my eyes

For the people who have died

Here we go

Welcome to my funeral

With out war

I don't even have a pulse

Is there something wrong with me?

As I cry

Deep in the night

I watch him die

Again and again

Teardrops fill

His lonely eyes

Why can't I save him?

Why can't I save you?

I am a ghost!

I am am so broken apart!

You are not my host!
You have broken my heart!

To pieces...

Reviews

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Again a somewhat confused piece due to the lack of good punctuation.
Some excellent lines here that need to be controlled so that the reader feels the words as you want them to be read.
Self questioning and self doubt. Written with passion and feeling.
Liked it but would like to see it edited better.

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is very sad.I think it is a struggle that the poet is having with himself yes?You penned it with a lot of emotion.Really good poem :)