Perfect Relationship

Tell me you love me,
Kiss my nose,
Hold my hand,
Don't let go.

Remember random facts about me.
Favorite color? Game? My middle name?

Remind me that I am on your mind.
Spontaneously hug me from behind.

Take me for long walks on the beach.
I'll learn something new that you can teach.

Make me feel like the only one.
Act silly, but still have fun.

Text me when we are far apart.
Remind me that we are close at heart.

Introduce me to your closest friends.
I'll make sure all your wounds will mend.

Include me in your future dream.
When you see me, I want your eyes to gleam.

Tell me your feelings are completely true.
Even after all that we've been through.

Remind me how long we will be together.
If this is real, I hope you say forever.

Author's Note

I wrote this in like 5 minutes in class while I wasn't really paying attention. I think it came out quite well though!

Reviews

[Arun Paul Kapur]

even though you only wrote it in 5 minutes, it was a lovely piece to read! I can envision so much with this , its beautiful in simplicity.

[James Huston]

wow that was a really great poem, it had so many visual things that you can feel. I like it alot, it was catchy yet intelligent.

[Henry Pepper]

A lovely piece! Though, there is no "Perfect Relationship". When a couple are genuine with each other, true to each other, all they can do, should do, is to make it as harmonious and real in whatever way they can

[Fictioneer]

Great Poem!!! If this is what you can do in five minutes, I would to see what you took your time with. You have a natural talent for writing, advice from a Creative Writing instructor.

[soliloquy]

This sounds professionally done..Very nice.....and from the heart.

[NaomiJim]

[V]

This is really good, especially since you did it in 5 minutes:3 I do think we all wish for this kind of relationship. The question is, is it attainable? Regardless, we all can dream can't we?

[LiberatedBeing]

I'm going to write these down and remember to do this with my girly. Thanks.

[John Fitzgerald]

i like the sentiment. hopeful, perhaps naive but with a genuine faith in love and life. well done.