Crumbling

I guess about the world. I can't write the same way I used to. Still has meaning though. I wrote this in about 10 minutes with a prompt. It's okay.

The sky falling down while the earth is crumbling in upon itself.

Or at least thats how it feels. 

The universe will soon be gone without a trace.

I stand alone as the world around me slowly peels.

The walls are cracked. The floor is gone.

I'm falling into the core that was never there.

The air is thick and its hard to breath.

Slowly my life is filled with despair. 

Reality has collapsed and fantasy has charred

Leaving me alone to fathom this catastrophe.

But my solution as that its meaningless. 

The only thing I long is to be free. 

Soon this will come to an extremity. It can only advance from this point. 

Even when the world is in decay the sky remains the same. 

The stars illuminate the road to euphoria.

They will light the way with their vivid flame.

Author's Note

I wrote this in about 10 minutes with a prompt. It's okay.

Reviews

[closed..acct]

I really enjoyed this piece,
such wonderful rhyme scheme,
deep and emotional piece,
Wonderful writing!

[Stella]

Great poem! I can't believe you wrote this in only 10 minutes!

[Daniel DeLorez]

I don't think this is "okay." I think it's amazing! Great display of vocabulary as well as imagination. Ten minutes is good for the length of this write. Excellent job... This is my new favorite on this site. :)

My only complaint is this line: "But my solution as that its meaningless." Can't figure out what you meant. Still, even the best writers make mistakes, and you've got talent. :)