Ocean Song

I am like a coral

Hydrated by the waves

Yet feeble in my form

Born from frail beauty

 

I sit upon majestic reef

Versing the language of colour

Like an aquatic bard

In azure waters, sentinel

 

Yet through murky haze I stare

Blankly into ocean chasms

Fogged by my own metaphor

Detached from my core

 

For I am just a coral

Dumb towards the world of art

Uninformed of what I represent

To blinded romantic fools

 

I am just a poem

Leaking lyrical charm

With linguistic zest

Crafted from fragile emotion

 

I sit delicately on the page

Reeling out sublime visions

Like supernatural utterences.

My tones are hums of pure perfection.

 

Yet strip me naked and tease me

Apart, ripping metaphorical seams

To unveil my simple form

A meek, resounding theme

 

For I am just a poem

I am laced with elegant lines

But the nexus of my being

Will be the memory in your mind.

Reviews

[Archia]

This was very well done, I loved the whole metaphor of the coral and I love how everything was brought together, especially the end, I loved how it brought in that idea of it just being a poem, yet more.

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

This is exceptional, I recognize it.

[Deron Alexis]

nice comparison ,interesting i liked this the way you tied the comparison together in the end well done

[Into_The_Cosmos]

I love the ocean so I am automatically going to love this! I love how the last half describes you as just being a poem, but with so much potential. Great job!

[Eric Cox]

Cool creative work. Nicely done.

[Bitter Overdose]

A very original insight on the life of a coral, literally and metaphorically. And yet poems are meant to be what they appear to be, within and throughout. I love the flow and the wording and the musical quality to it. Awesome poem!

[The Nameless]

Very original, wonderful theme.
Interesting comparison between the coral and the poem.
It is true that it cannot see its own beauty.

I'm sure you left your poems in many people's minds ;P

Great poem, enjoyed reading =D

[sithlordjp]

Excellent It's original, a great tribute to the very act of creative writing!

[gabrielle]

As always, you penned a very fascinating write. i love that every time i read your work, i learn new words. Thank you.

[Nikki Hughes]

I love this poem! Keep on writing, you are doing great.