Undone By You

I am undone by you

Worried

Concerned about you

Where are you

Who hurt you

Where can I find you

Will you tell me

Will you escape

I can’t wait

To hear

To know

Where will you

Go

From here

Don’t you know

How dear

You are

So far

From you

I can only hope

You’ll be ok

That I’ll hear

That I’ll know

You are where

You need to be

To know for sure

That you are free

Reviews

[OceanTropic]

I love it. I LOVE it. I have felt like this before. Always wondering about that person, how and where and who and when. It is like their freedom, their "ok" makes us feel better about ourselves. We want to know their pains, their hurts, what makes them smile, because for us it means more than they think. And we become "undone", and they seem to be the only person who can weave us back together by just letting us know.

[Robert Luna]

The desire and hunger that lingered in each one of these words. I felt the want and need the seeped from this piece. I love the way you were able to pull me into this so easily as it consumed my thoughts so vividly.



Well Done!!!!!!

[E. M. Murren]

Another wonderful work... this one is just plain lovely. Beautifully expressed. Many cheers.

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This is good like all of your work! It says a lot. I could feel the emotions. The structure is good. I have to agree that it does resemble a key. Very nice job!

[The Elder Pine]

I liked this piece very much. I liked the line arrangement of this piece. I think it fits the message of the piece. I also think that the shape of it resembles a key, implying that the wonderings and the whispers of a concerned mind may bring back someone who has been lost.