Your Obsession

You smacked me down after you tracked me down and left me alone for dead.

Mistaken you were about the cure you thought would clear your head.

Reviews

[Sally Edwards]

Wow, short and powerful, says it all really, great write.

[J. Marc]

Hummm!
This is a very concise and yet powerful poem!
Was it taken from a real life experience?
I hope not.
You do have the sense of style and rhythm which augur a lot more interesting peoms to come!
Thank you very much for not letting this kind of thing go "unpunished"!!

[The Elder Pine]

Yes indeed I would agree, there are so many places you could take this piece I as a reader. Keep up the could work!

[[untitled]]

I thought your poem was great! It was well written. I think you have talent. To be able to express yourself in just a couple sentences is amazing.

[BlakeL79]

Excellent work here. Very pointed and fun to read. The rhyme is well done. Welcome to the Cafe!

[Ani Ashford]

I agree, there is a story in your words. Powerful in its shortness.

[Eagle Cruagh]

A lot of violence and a big story in those
two lines.
You could probably build a book around
your little story, you have my attention.
Good work !
---- Eagle Cruagh