Between the Lines

Upon your page
I still long to find
words to soothe
this hurting mind

I need to know
yet cannot ask
Is it too late for
ghosts of the past?

My mind plays tricks
and I can't see clear
words to confirm
you still hold me dear

I imagine a message
between the lines
your love yet blooms
within your rhymes

Wishful thinking
a mere fools plight
to think you dream
of me tonight

A hopeful glimpse,
that word or two,
I often see
to me from you

That which I seek,
yet never find
fills those spaces
between the lines

Reviews

[Creepy Swine Guy]

This is beautiful, tragic and sad all at once. I've seen a lot of people on here try to do rhyme ... and not succeed. They don't take the care that you have obviously taken here, making sure each rhyme fits ... tending to the rhythm of the poem while maintaining the integrity of the message. These are some of your best words.

[LA Lorena]

Thank you Swiney. That means a lot to me. I do love rythym and rhyme, and finding that perfect meter, and I think that has a lot to do with why I can (often)do it. If you try to force it, it shows, glaringly.

[Creepy Swine Guy]

I LOVE it when you call me Swiney!!

[LA Lorena]

LOL! Well CSG just seems so bloody impersonal, and I refuse to say it!

[Ladysue]

this was very lyrical...love the title...beautifully expressed...

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exquisite poem ..you have conveyed the complexities of reading others words and how we can easily mislead or misinterpret things..and how we look for meaning between the lines ..love this.

[FJ Davis]

This is an elegant love poem directed at someone who may well not be worthy of the poet.
A man could be accomplished in every field of endeavor, and if he did not possess the inclination or the wherewithal to love you, what good would he be to you? Sometimes, we not only want things we can't have, we want things we shouldn't have; indeed, things we would be most fortunate not to get.
A wonderful bit of work created by an extremely tal;ented woman who does not love herself nearly enough.

[ju]

flows beautifully. quite heart breaking really. maybe- or a dream about to come true.

[Forest Green]

Poet to poet...writer to writer...expressions find the parallels wanted and sometimes not. And surprisingly enough, it isn't always about the rhythm or the rhyme.
Nicely expressed...!
Daniel

[Tasha]

I've read between the lines and I loved it. You did an awesome job Lorena. :)

[Dream Weaver]

I'm reading between the lines and what I
get from it is a great feeling from a great
rhythmic flow, nice job Lorena :)