Between the Lines

Upon your page
I still long to find
words to soothe
this hurting mind

I need to know
yet cannot ask
Is it too late for
ghosts of the past?

My mind plays tricks
and I can't see clear
words to confirm
you still hold me dear

I imagine a message
between the lines
your love yet blooms
within your rhymes

Wishful thinking
a mere fools plight
to think you dream
of me tonight

A hopeful glimpse,
that word or two,
I often see
to me from you

That which I seek,
yet never find
fills those spaces
between the lines

Reviews

[Creepy Swine Guy]

This is beautiful, tragic and sad all at once. I've seen a lot of people on here try to do rhyme ... and not succeed. They don't take the care that you have obviously taken here, making sure each rhyme fits ... tending to the rhythm of the poem while maintaining the integrity of the message. These are some of your best words.

[LA Lorena]

Thank you Swiney. That means a lot to me. I do love rythym and rhyme, and finding that perfect meter, and I think that has a lot to do with why I can (often)do it. If you try to force it, it shows, glaringly.

[Creepy Swine Guy]

I LOVE it when you call me Swiney!!

[LA Lorena]

LOL! Well CSG just seems so bloody impersonal, and I refuse to say it!

[FJ Davis]

Nevermind.

[fargone]

a lovely poem LA. i can feel the hope and longing within. who could ever stop thinking of u, my friend :)
having said that, i believe the past can never be fully reclaimed as it once was. but, i guess we all live in hope sometimes. beautifully written :)

[Art Sun]

how we do wish even for the thought of another to place thought upon us...love is so emotional no...nice work Lorena

[Aidz]

A kewl write that flows nicely, well done

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

Seeking out the words we long to know, great poem.

[Vanny]

This is a beautiful write, and flows very well. -S...

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

This puts me in mind of the nightmare one could live in when they fall in love with a poet and love ends badly. They find themselves reading each line with hope in their hearts that they will read the love they no longer see in the eyes.....beautiful

[Lily Mae]

I think there are definitely times we would just like to know if our true feeling get across:) You've penned those thoughts and emotions well..xx

[Joel M Frye]

Perception is one part what is there, one part what is not, one part what I would have it be. A reverberating, hollow ache resides in those spaces between the lines, and echoes throughout the words. Well-captured, LA.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A serious take on fever writing, a well thought out piece.