The Literal Sense of the Word

just a light verse to match today's mood.

I chose the outfit with much care
spent countless hours on face and hair
primped and preened a perfect look
the worm, you dangled on my hook

Your eyes beheld a ravished glow
imagining pleasures we'd soon know
a night of promise,  how it would unfold
on satin sheets, two lovers bold
lights on high and kinky heels
you'd soon know how my passion feels

I'm feeling rather naughty, as I've a wont to do
and judging by your leering look, the same is said for you
I lean a little closer, let my breast just graze your arm
feeling rather brazen I decide to up the charm
I huskily whisper something rather tempting in your ear
watch the lump rise in your throat as you struggle to stay clear

Your answer at first hesitant, then you finally find your voice
You dis my hair, my makeup, tear apart my wardrobe choice
you have a cutting commentary, you do not miss a thing
barbs cut me to the quick, for words they sure can sting

that hand that seconds earlier was running up your thigh
reaches out to slap your face whilst I begin to cry
you're left there looking stupid, unsure what you've said
but you know you'll be alone tonight, not warming this girl's bed

the bewildered look is priceless,Oh,you know you've displeased me
that's not what I had in mind, when I asked you to please "tease me"

Reviews

[David Scott]

Ah... To miss the cue of the music of passion. It us a thing of instinct. Off beat the ripped dress is a travesty. Yet, on the beatbwith tempo matched you can rip the dress from breast to thigh and receive a moan of pleasure. Thus is not something that can be planned or educated. It is chemistry...
May you wardrobe be blissfully destroyed! ;)

[LA Lorena]

LMAO! I don't want it destroyed! Maybe just mussed up a little. ;)

[Kaylor Mason]

Poor dumb schmuck

[LA Lorena]

ROFLMAO!!!!!!!!

[Frieda P]

This is grand, I love it, it took a complete about face from being tantalizing--very clever. I love how you threw that wrench in, I didn't see it coming. Great work.

[LA Lorena]

Thanks. I love wrenches! :)

[Frieda P]

As if I didn't know. ;-)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

What kind of man would pass up a moment of intense passion... a fool, that is who... nice twist to the poem and a very fun read.

[C.R.Turner]

Haha!! Brilliant and amusing tale! Now I understand where I've been going wrong all these years! :)

[LA Lorena]

LOL, glad you enjoyed it. I had fun writing it. I enjoy writing about observational type situations, and how perspectives are so different between men and women.

[Joel M Frye]

Communication is the problem to be answered...one would think the man would have the great good sense to consider context before engaging mouth. He must not have been a poet.... Whimsical write, and well done, LA.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

wicked~ the first few stanzas offer very enticing lure and the SHAZAM!~
I have also found in the generic male that they have a difficult time discerning between playful and crude~ and usually end up with a stinging palm on their face~lol

[SpokenWord]

ROFL... Oh ok, that was priceless. Yes guys do not think before speak or before they tease. I love the set up to this how you showed the time it took to primp and prep yourself to see him and to please him and then how it twists and he tosses it all away without knowing how or why. and you even had on high and kinky heels now I know he is kicking himself for that mistake. Loved it~

[Forest Green]

Time to yank the chain, rattle the cage, put some stimulant into somebody's brain...!
We've got a clueless one here, damaged by the open mouth exit brain phenemona...often leading to the silence of an empty room...a lousy b**b tube substitution.
Nicely rhymed...poetic justice.
Steel

[northern monkey]

Love it. This really made me wince. Your brilliant observations of the sexes hits so hard when so rhythmically expressed. Lily Allen would relish singing your words. Great feeling reading such quality writing.