There

I'll not let on

I carry on composed.  stoic

my surface granite encrusted

memories live, breathe, feel

eyes dead hollow

long since drowned in depths of earthy brown

 

I walk a different ocean's shores

yet those breezes ever carry

the co-mingled and lingering scent of love

Chanel Sensuelle Allure and heady musk

odor settles like cumulus

permeating every pore

infused with every ragged breath

Inhale.  I take you in.

you enter and seek solace in my depths

 

Air electric.  atoms charged

every nerve and fibre at attention

you fill me

I see you everywhere

strain for that touch

 

No matter the time, space, or distance between

drawn and written lines and words of past and present

 

I ache, yearn, hunger

close my eyes to truth.  Exhale

I still feel you...

   There

Reviews

[The 13th Eros]

Those damn stoic masks of stone that we choose to wear do little to hide the frail fragments of what lies behind our eyes. In the place of the aching, those feelings of hunger devour any sense of peace for what was. I hope this comes from your brilliant imagination, sweet poet, and not from biography.

[Verser]

I agree with jacob. Just leave the word "odor out." It was going to be my suggestion, but jacob is smarter faster.

Can I publish this?

[LA Lorena]

certainly Verser, feel free. thanks for dropping in, and I appreciate the kind words, as always.

[Kaylor Mason]

"You enter and seek solace in my depths" I like that one.

[LA Lorena]

thank you kailer, I appreciate your comments. :)

[C.R.Turner]

Breath-taking.

[LA Lorena]

thank you C.R. Usually I am the smart-a*s you know and have come to expect....but inside, lurks a marshmallow.

[C.R.Turner]

Go toast yourself! :)

[LA Lorena]

I will be, in less than 2 weeks!

[David Scott]

A loss that leaves a hole that will never be filled. This write is a telling glance up to heaven wanting just a glimmer of hope to break the hard ice of the shell of pain.
Soooo true and soooo good!

[LA Lorena]

thank you david. this was a special piece and a special peace for me.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

distance makes no difference in love. Love is what it is and remains strong in every memory.......beautiful Lorena.

[LA Lorena]

thank you Neva.

[Aidz]

drawn in short sharp breathes of vermillion head rushes that take in the clouds

[LA Lorena]

thanks for reading Aidz. sleep tight!

[Distant horizons]

What a beautiful memory to long for once more. When memory brings so much emotion, longing, desire, even sadness at its distance, then you know how cherished a memory that is. beautifully portrayed to the reader sweetie. That ending exhale clinches it.

[LA Lorena]

thank you Lorry.

[Distant horizons]

:-)

[Nick.B]

Interesting poem, love the line "I walk a different ocean's shores" you managed to show that life is worth living with his/her presence there with you, memories will never die...anyway great job

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

This is like rebirth in the heart, like wisdom of having experienced much, I can feel the tangible self-growth through love in this.

It's as if love has touched a spiritual awareness and come back to her roots with new illuminations.

[LA Lorena]

what doesn't kill us either makes us stronger, or else leaves us wishing it did kill us.

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

I always find what doesn't kill me just makes me more sensitive, but maybe that's just me :P

[LA Lorena]

I hear you. I just try to keep my inner marshmallow centre covered in chocolate.

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

I shall adopt your metaphor in my inner defenses then :) hehe

[LA Lorena]

I'm warning you...if you end up posting a poem where my chocolate gets licked off, I'm gonna want credit, and a copy! ;)

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

oh gosh you are giving me ideas!

[Tree]

That first stanza really set the tone. A vivid journey into a world of desire and/ limitation. How do we reconcile the two? Sometimes we don't we just carry the burden of memory, and the taste of love. A passionate and melancholy piece that hit home. Well penned LA

Diego

[LA Lorena]

thank you Diego. I appreciate your kind review.