Spelling It Out

wide spaces and vast skies of poetic verse

 

leave much to interpretation

 

inviting one to fill in the voids

 

and read between the lines

 

infusing hope where there is none

 

 

If I narrow the gap

will the writing become more clear

will you finally see clarity instead of optimism

thatIleavenoroomforfalsepromisesordreamsofmighthavebeens

OR MUST I RESORT TO THE USE OF BOLD PRINT

 

 

 

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like this...letting the reader see what he or she sees..which is the best way to approach poetry, and then you go to the squeezing the lines together..but insteand
of clarity, it becomes a jumbled confused mess...and then the bold...like yelling at the reader to "GET IT"---

i so like the sarcasm here.

jacob

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarri..]

I Like to leave quite a space for my reader to breathe and fly around as heshe pleases, but sometime i like playing tricks

Nice one

[Antonio Valentino]

yeah speaking of spelling, holy Alfalfa Bites.. i mean alphabe.. oh nevermind hahaha.. not sure why you had to... YELL AT THE END!! lol
i just opened a fortune cookie at a chinese restaurant tonight that read, Help I'm A Slave In A Chinese Fortune Cookie Factory!

Ahhh those Asians.. such a funny people

okay, okay, i wont try to, fill in, any more voids.. waww what a party pooper.. haha

[LA Lorena]

I had to raise my voice at the end so that someone would take notice, and read the words for what they are, and not keep seeing hope and mixed messages at every turn.

[Antonio Valentino]

oh i know, i was jus foolin about :)

[LA Lorena]

LOL, well fool away. I won't stop you! ;)

[Antonio Valentino]

good.. cuz theres no foo like an ol foo.. just ask any young foo.. haha :)

[Ken Simm.]

Ah!. Which came first? Answer the question Kenneth! Must you resort to bold. Well I've always seen you as a sort of bold person anyway. Or leavingnoroom. Well that way you risk creating new words tht maybe subject to new meanings. Or could that be your intention? I'm confused now.
Actually I think this is excellent, gentle, wry, witty and charming. (Phew I think I got away with that one, what do you think Kenneth?)

[LA Lorena]

I think it doesn't really matter what you say Kenneth, or how you phrase it. I like you enough to let you off the hook easy. ;)

[Ken Simm.]

Double phew.

[Verser]

For all its visual attractiveness, clever formatting, and wry humor, the poem is actually pretty serious (or am I talking about myself). Life ain't pretty, no matter what the "pretty poets" tell us. You get to the real destination in a cute little vehicle. Nice.

[LA Lorena]

thanks verser. I use what ever vehicle is at my disposal, but rest assured I will never resort to using the bus. ;)

[Verser]

You're way too cool (and too smart) for a bus, my poetess.

[Aidz]

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[Tate Morgan]

I like this thatIleavenoroomforfalsepromisesordreamsofmighthavebeens lol It remeinded me of a friend i have in the south who thinks a word should be as long as a breath can endure such as his favorite. Stewppididdiot lol he cracks me up everytime we talk because i have to cut the word into sepparate words.

[KAOlmsted]

I love visual poetry...the way a piece looks on the page is nearly as important as the words in the piece...I try to make my pieces as visually pleasing as I can, while maintaining the structure; you've done that beautifully here. You know who's good at that type of formatting? James William Dyer...seriously phenomenal poet here on WC, if you have not read him, may I suggest you rectify that wrong tout de suite...he will often ask you to click on a link because he can't quite capture the look he wants within the confines of WC, but I promise you...it is always worth it.

Anyway...bottom line, of course, is excellent piece, LA...great work here.

[LA Lorena]

I do know who he is. I have read a few of his poems. Thanks kimmer.

[KAOlmsted]

Ah good. My pleasure, LA.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

You might nee to make it a little bigger for the senile... Poetry for the most part is subjective but on occasion it can be straight forward, just not everyone is smart enough to know the difference. I always enjoy your witty sarcasm.

[LA Lorena]

Me, sarcastic? you think? ;) I prefer to think of myself as a sassy smart a*s. :D

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

How about a classy little sassy?

[LA Lorena]

that works for me! ;)

[Frieda P]

Wow, I love this LA...it's like WAKE UP AND SMELL THE COFFEE, sometimes a rose is just a rose...or whatever. You are too clever for your own good. ;-)

[LA Lorena]

Or wake up and smell the jelly donuts. Okay, you have to read Lorry's review below to get THAT! Yes, exactly. Sometimes, it just is what it is, nothing more. I'm not all that clever frieda, just like to mix it up a bit, and keep everyone guessing what type of drugs I use.

[Frieda P]

Ha, I think you're high on life my friend! ;-)
That Lorry, he's a pretty funny guy too, would love to read this deep poetry of jellydonuts...