Feel Me

I sense and feel

a presence on the page

my font vibrates

with the touch

of those eyes

 

lines and spaces

tingle

 echo hollowness

and once again

I lay naked and exposed to you

open and willing

to be taken inch by inch

slowly and languorously

 

splay innermost folds

of my mind

tease with fingers deft

and plunge 

 slick depth

to my hardened core

 

fill me with your need

and I'll give to you my own

 

my longing is for your words

 

whilst others seek

to decorate with diamonds

drench me in pearls

of your heart's pen

 

let the words

roll off your captive tongue

and free your spirit

to feel me

touch me

know me

 

my release

shall be pleasure doubled

when shared

betwixt two

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[FJ Davis]

Most readers don't seem to realize how extremely intelligent you are. I've noticed because I consider high intelligence to be a threat to my existence.
Why, you ask? Couldn't a very smart individual be a valuable friend?
Unfortunately, such persons are, invariably, far too perceptive to socialize with the likes of me. Hence, my perceived possible contention.
Will now try to impress you with the quality of my intellect: This piece has everything to do with a deep and abiding love for words, and little--if anything--to do with an arousing description of the sex act.
How come I now feel more like a big liar than a big brain?

[LA Lorena]

you need not try to impress me with your intellect. it is quite apparent. You have no fear for your existence, or for our friendship. I loves ya, and your stuck with me now.

[LA Lorena]

you feel that way frank, because you know the poetess well enough to not just comment on what she writes, but to actually contemplate whether she had her tongue in cheek or sticking out when she writes a particular piece. You know if you could see her eyes, you would have a better inkling if she is serious, joking, probing or teasing.

[bob, small b. aka invs]

I see in this poem and your Poet, Exposed a common theme that I relate to. the sensuality of words and writing. the capability of such seduction and feelings very real and deep. you express it so well here. beautiful work.

[LA Lorena]

thank you. I did agonize over both of those writes. Most will read both of those and see just a steamy, veiled erotic poem, but I count on a very few to see beyond that, and actually glimmer some insight as to the words and emotions. I thank you for being one of those few.

[Onyia-Ali, Kingsley Chu..]

I appreciate the arrangement and the content of the poem, the imagery is depicted well, so when read we can feel the sensation. well done. Lorena.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

The words reach further than skin deep...they are more than tattoos...they are roadmaps to the heart. I enjoyed this very much. Thank you for sharing your gift.

[writing mojo]

this is a good out of the box experience for you, I love it, the flow the stumbling images in left a lone stanzas. As far as I can tell, you enjoy the free pleasure verse, keep it up and those frames of structure you desire in your poetry, well will fall away to open space and what is better to an artist but open space to cover with unedited desire...great piece

[LA Lorena]

so you seek to convert me do you? I am enjoying playing with the creativity of free verse. I just have difficulty in knowing if and when I am doing it right! LOL. metered rhyme is easier to gauge for oneself, as you can read it aloud to feel the cadence and flow, see what needs tweaking, or what feels awkward and jumpy. This is a whole new experience for me. Thanks for your kind words of encouragement. I do seek to grow and learn!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hi La Lorena, a lovely, warm, sensual piece. Languorously is such a splendid expressive word that says it all!

[LA Lorena]

LOL, I love that word! It even rolls of the tongue so perfectly, doesn't it?

[Frieda P]

Were you in your shoe closet when you wrote this? How else would you releae such ecstacy? ;-)

[LA Lorena]

LMAO! no shoe closet today. my work feet are very boring!

[Coyote Poetry]

I love the way you use the language.
"I lay naked and exposed to you
open and willing
to be taken inch by inch
slowly and languorously"
I could read your poetry over and over again. Amazing flow of thoughts in the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[LA Lorena]

thank you Coyote. I am trying to branch out somewhat. I mostly have done rhyming poetry, as I enjoy it best, but I am learning to get a little creative with this new style. I am glad you have enjoyed it.

[KAOlmsted]

There is such a soft sensuousness to your prose that makes me want to just curl up with an entire book of it, with a glass of wine and a fire crackling in the background...and I don't know if you've gathered, but I am not a sucker for pretty prose...so you know I mean what I say when I say I loved this. Thank you so much for sharing it...

[LA Lorena]

thank you kimmer! I take that as the highest form of praise, when something that I have written, even though not the type or style that someone ordinarily appreciates, makes them take notice and glean a new appreciation. Thank you!

[KAOlmsted]

My pleasure...

[KarinaT]

I should say something clever and deep but all I can say is that I love it.

[LA Lorena]

Thanks Karina. I'm glad you dropped in to tell me so!

[DrD]

Damn, my writings did all that? I'm gonna' tell Myrna, maybe she'll read more. Do you get a special thrill out of commas and semi-colons? Paragraphs of passion, phrases of ecstacy. Loved it. Makes me want to write more. Maybe it's contagious.

[LA Lorena]

Thanks DrD. Glad you enjoyed it, and I do hope it inspires Myrna to read and write more.