Poet, Exposed

Do you ever wonder? decided to take it out of the box for this one. My thinking, that is!

Hooded nib exposed

he takes it in hand

under cloak of darkness

calloused, work-weary fingers

curl intimately

around its smooth girth

he begins the ancient rythym

slow, hesitant strokes

coaxing, teasing

gently kneading

pleading for sweet release

strokes grow bolder

gun-fire quick

furious, angry strokes

to wring forth

 each spilling seed

 retreat, pace slows

as the last drips out

 dreamily

drop by sweet drop

black pearls

upon the page

reading his words now

I can't help but wonder

is it me he thinks of 

when he writes?

 

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

I love this...not much else to say. I just seriously love the--and you will forgive the pun--flow of this piece. I'm not a man, so I have no idea what an actual wank session feels like (I can't believe I just said "wank session" in a review; especially a review of such a beautiful piece) but I do know what it's like to squeeze those drops of black pearls onto the page, and I imagine the release is just as sweet...The comparison is brilliant...and that question at the end; I've wondered that a few times, myself, but I'm usually way off base *laugh* Just another narcissist living in her own head ;-) But this is an extraordinary write, LA, seriously. Thank you so much for sharing this with us.

-kimmer

[LA Lorena]

LMAO! I can't believe that someone wrote "WANK SESSION" in a review of my work either! LOLOLOL. Usually get those comments in my inbox. ;)
Thank you for the nice words Kimmer, glad you found it worthy. I do like to try to experiment with my writing and always enjoy surprising my readers with something unexpected.

[Relic]

I love wank sessions myself.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Hmmmm....hmmmm Won't bother to comment further than this. " If I could stick a pen knife in my heart and bleed all over the stage..." Mick Jagger
As love is more than sex so is poetry more than writing. But the French do call an orgasm, "the little death"

[Coyote Poetry]

I believe we will never know of the great writer's of the past. Hemingway, Kosinski and Singers lived in a hard time. Survived terrible wars. I believe writer's who lived give glimpse of their life in their story and poetry. A powerful poem. Open the door to a long discussion. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[LA Lorena]

Thank you Coyote, I'm glad you enjoyed this poem. I had fun creating this one.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

La Lorena, This is a lovely, sensual metaphor. So well writen it has such a depth of feeling and beautifully observed. Lovely. Love Kimmers exchange with you, you are both just so good to have on WC.

[DrD]

I have absolutely no comment.

[LA Lorena]

God hates a coward Dr.D!

[DrD]

It's not a question of cowardice. I just never have enough privacy for that sort of thing. I even have someone go in the bathroom with me. My doctor told me not to do any heavy lifting.

[LA Lorena]

ROFLMAO!!!!!

[KarinaT]

oh that is priceless!

[DrD]

That's what they all say. Genetics, I guess.

[DrD]

That's what they all say. Genetics, I guess. Thanks anyway, Karina.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

if it is you?

then there are intense feelings for him to start banging the keys almost angrily...

but i would think the anger has more to do with his frustration to describe his feelings exactly as they are...he can't find the "write" words to convey his love.

like this.

jacob

[LA Lorena]

You always leave the most thoughtful reviews. :) welcome to the real men club!

[Relic]

ahahahah, brilliant is the one word that comes to mind when reading this. As for myself, I rarely ever run out of ink. Clever and funny. Great poem I can only give 100 to.

[LA Lorena]

Thank you Relic. Another proud member *pun intended* of the real men club!

[Relic]

I'm a member in good standing.

[LA Lorena]

LOLOL! you're quick! (that may be a compliment, or a barb) ;)

[Relic]

Oh, it's a compliment for sure my lovely lady.

[LA Lorena]

I was refering to the "you're quick" . you gotta be on your toes to keep up with me! ;)

[Relic]

Oh, but you would never throw a barb so that's how I know it's a compliment. You see, I am quick. ;)

[Relic]

Okay, I now realize I'm slower than I thought, I get it now. hahahaha

[LA Lorena]

my jokes lose something when I have to explain them! ;)

[Relic]

It's okay, I'm slow sometimes. Which at times can be a good thing though. ;)

[LA Lorena]

nice to see you catch on Relic! ;)

[Relic]

Yeah, I usually do at some point. Hold on, let me read your message again and make sure I'm not missing anything. No, I on't think I am.

BTW, congrats on making the feature page with this.

[LA Lorena]

I've never made it to the front page before. I'm usually right in the middle, but without benefit of having the staples thru my navel ;)

[Relic]

haha, I've only made it once with 11 rules. All the way to number 1 too. That is where this should be.

[LA Lorena]

you're too sweet Relic, thank you.

[Relic]

I calls em the way I sees em. There's still a chance it will get to number one. I'll be watching.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Imaginations is what makes a writer great and we can take inspiration from anywhere... plus white out is essential if using a pen, LOL

Now this could be the reason you are on the naughty list. And I probably am for enjoying writes like this :)

[LA Lorena]

I'm sure you are on the naughty list Dale, right near the top of it. Not sure that heels and red lace will help YOU get off santa's naughty list though, but you are welcome to try. Oh, and please post pictures! Welcome to the club, another proud member.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

A proud member? Of what may I ask? men who wear stockings? Believe me you wouldn't want to see pics of that.

[LA Lorena]

the real men club. men who are not too afraid to post a review on this poem.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Oh that club, WHEW!! Thought I was gonna get a reputation as a cross dresser, LOL

[Robin]

the imagination is a wonderful thing ...

[LA Lorena]

now there's a brave soul! thank you Robin! Welcome to the REAL men club!

[Robin]

Really ? you think a Surreal Man would fit in ?

[LA Lorena]

What *I* think of as a real man may not bear much resemblance to what the rest of society thinks, but then again, I do march to my own little drum. If I say it is so, it is so!

[Frieda P]

sounds more like bongo's LA ;)

[LA Lorena]

I'm finding it rather ironic that despite the fact that most of my other poems are reviewed more by men, very few of them have reviewed this particular piece? ;)

I'm going to ponder this a while, but kudos to the brave souls who did manage to find it inside themselves to bold a review! I know who the real men are here!

[Frieda P]

I think they're intimidated by Aidz ;-)

[LA Lorena]

Ya, you're probably right. That was a review to end all reviews wasn't it? I can tell he really worked hard on that one, getting it just right!

[Frieda P]

plus he's standing with his arms crossed, looks like he's saying 'don't even try you mofo'! haha ;)

[LA Lorena]

but he is smiling. smiles are friendly!

[Frieda P]

that's a s**t a*s grin, not a smile! ;P

[LA Lorena]

No, tis a friendly, happy sort of smile, not a menacing grimmace.

[Frieda P]

no, I've seen that smile before, it's the kind that says, 'i'm a really nice guy until you step over that line, then I eat you for breakfast' :)

[Aidz]

You been talking bout me??? The words where composed slowly with purpose, then steadily built to a crescendo of a joyful expulsion of coloUr upon the screen...

Grimace I was holding back a fart

[LA Lorena]

LOL!

[Frieda P]

Remind me not to pen next to you! :P

[Aidz]

Oh Ill be penning dont you worry

[Frieda P]

then you should sit next to Myrna...

[Aidz]

Two ways to review, the "obvious" tongue in cheek... Hence the mature rating (personally I would not have made it so as it shows the key to easily) or the other which is the masterful and purposeful strokes you have used upon the shaft, skilled in your craft to illicit every last pearl from the rigid member, leaving the writer spent... I wonder if the shaft rested on your lips while in deep thought leaving a smudge of ink on the corner of your mouth...

:)

[LA Lorena]

you know damn well it did! ;)

[LA Lorena]

I debated that. have gone and changed it now. thanks for the constructive comment. :)

[Aidz]

My pleasure :)

[Frieda P]

Wow, that was an orgasmic review you got chickie ;)

[LA Lorena]

LOL. He is a master at creativity. have you met Aidz? allow me to introduce you. Aidz, Frieda could use a big brother. :)

[Frieda P]

gee thanks you blew my chances right off the bat! ;)

[Aidz]

Who blue who??

[Frieda P]

isn't that whom? ha, hey...or what? lol