Poet, Exposed

Do you ever wonder? decided to take it out of the box for this one. My thinking, that is!

Hooded nib exposed

he takes it in hand

under cloak of darkness

calloused, work-weary fingers

curl intimately

around its smooth girth

he begins the ancient rythym

slow, hesitant strokes

coaxing, teasing

gently kneading

pleading for sweet release

strokes grow bolder

gun-fire quick

furious, angry strokes

to wring forth

 each spilling seed

 retreat, pace slows

as the last drips out

 dreamily

drop by sweet drop

black pearls

upon the page

reading his words now

I can't help but wonder

is it me he thinks of 

when he writes?

 

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

I love this...not much else to say. I just seriously love the--and you will forgive the pun--flow of this piece. I'm not a man, so I have no idea what an actual wank session feels like (I can't believe I just said "wank session" in a review; especially a review of such a beautiful piece) but I do know what it's like to squeeze those drops of black pearls onto the page, and I imagine the release is just as sweet...The comparison is brilliant...and that question at the end; I've wondered that a few times, myself, but I'm usually way off base *laugh* Just another narcissist living in her own head ;-) But this is an extraordinary write, LA, seriously. Thank you so much for sharing this with us.

-kimmer

[LA Lorena]

LMAO! I can't believe that someone wrote "WANK SESSION" in a review of my work either! LOLOLOL. Usually get those comments in my inbox. ;)
Thank you for the nice words Kimmer, glad you found it worthy. I do like to try to experiment with my writing and always enjoy surprising my readers with something unexpected.

[Relic]

I love wank sessions myself.

[The Nude Writer]

Wow! What a poem! We are talking about writing, right? Hehe.
Amazing parallels, and double meanings :)

[LA Lorena]

LOL, yes, we are talking about writing dear NW. I'm rather fond of innuendo and double entendres. ;)

[The Nude Writer]

Always fun to come up with them :)

[WhiteWillow]

Clever analogy. Read it more than once, to appreciate the words in their different meanings. Great write

[LA Lorena]

thank you. I'm having fun playing with free verse instead of my usual rhyming poetry of late.

[David Scott]

I think you know... And if the release is found dies the answer matter?
Your poetry is as inspirational as I'm sure your person is!
May your "nib" be ever stimulated! ;)

[LA Lorena]

thank you dear. my "nib' is always stimulated. ;)

[Dalia]

I loved this poem, I can relate to it, I liked this description the most : black pearls

upon the page

[MOON]

Ha ha , this is clever , poet exposed the imagery ...

[LA Lorena]

thanks moon.

[bob, small b. aka invs]

writing is a passion and it is solitary. i don't know why this metaphor isn't used all the time. i guess it takes a special poet to coax the truth from the tip of the pen.

[LA Lorena]

LOL. I don't know about being special, I just know that I am brave enough to write what and how I want to, without much care as to how it is regarded by others. I refuse to adopt a style or write on subjects to increase my popularity or market appeal. Let the masses think what they may.

[Muse]

You revealed the dream coat of lies. We write for ourselves..not to get someone off. But then again...I only speak for myself.

[LA Lorena]

we write to express ourselves, we open up our experiences and share our thoughts, hopes and secrets with those who read us. We write to free and liberate ourselves and to connect on a level with the reader thru our medium of words.It doesn't get much more intimate than that.

[writing mojo]

wow, is this a self destructed read (red) hand to the poet! it's forms a masturbation stratosphere, this sexual world tension you give a below the belt check too...amazing piece

[LA Lorena]

are you trying to tell me i give good pen?

[LA Lorena]

I actually have you to thank for this one, it came about after our conversation about me taking things outside of the box and trying to get freer with using free verse instead of always rhyme and meter. I wanted to give you some credit for inspiring it, but thought it might look kind of funny in the reviewers notes. LOL.

[writing mojo]

LOL I have to say well, um yeah, but don't trend to ego socked with those heels, leave them in the box for a better guest, I am vulnerable one...

[writing mojo]

thanks for letting me be your muse, It's an honor to be...you done the same for me as well...

[LA Lorena]

aww, thanks Mojo!

[writing mojo]

I am not shoooing you away LA, please don't take it that way...I really am in honor, of the out of box experience.. I am just a newly wed, and thou I like our friendly banter, and it gets my wit juices flowing, I always have to remember I am no longer single, I do admire what you do, you are way beyond my brain can comprehend, but I have to keep it on a flirt less level, for my guilt would have me gut checked....I know am a pathetic poet...

[LA Lorena]

LOLOL! Relax Mojo! I mean you no harm. When I said you inspired this, I meant the conversation about not being so rational and analytical and calculating each line, just going with it, and letting it fall where it may poetically. That was the impetus for me to try something very different. You are safe from my evil clutches, and I promise to leave your virtue intact! ;)

[writing mojo]

cool, i feel great that you said that...again it's my senses lost in translation, it's my curse and gift, so i am told...

[LA Lorena]

Personally, I think maybe you need to loosen up your necktie a bit. Perhaps it's too tight and causing a lack of oxygen to the brain? ;) You're a doll mojo, and I think you are great, and a fabulous poet with mad talent, but you have to stop imagining high heeled monsters lurking beneath your bed ready to pounce.

[writing mojo]

true, I do

[Michael G.]

I don't think I've ever put the two together, quite the way you have here. I can say that at some point in time, I may have had the same final vision in mind at the end of a ... write. That's gonna be my story, and I'm gonna stick with it.
(You sure you didn't start this out to be about you and someone "close?" It does seem that way.)
Fun read!

[quinfinn]

i so badly want to say that this poem is totally "whack" but....the double entendre would be malicious comment on a very good and entertaining write. i can see that you have things well in hand so i'll be getting off now! oh, was i too forthcoming with my analogy?

[quinfinn]

oh, i had forgotten that i read this already....

[LA Lorena]

LOL. yes you did Quin. And you gave quite the funny review too. It was priceless.

[quinfinn]

aw shucks!