Poet, Exposed

Do you ever wonder? decided to take it out of the box for this one. My thinking, that is!

Hooded nib exposed

he takes it in hand

under cloak of darkness

calloused, work-weary fingers

curl intimately

around its smooth girth

he begins the ancient rythym

slow, hesitant strokes

coaxing, teasing

gently kneading

pleading for sweet release

strokes grow bolder

gun-fire quick

furious, angry strokes

to wring forth

 each spilling seed

 retreat, pace slows

as the last drips out

 dreamily

drop by sweet drop

black pearls

upon the page

reading his words now

I can't help but wonder

is it me he thinks of 

when he writes?

 

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

I love this...not much else to say. I just seriously love the--and you will forgive the pun--flow of this piece. I'm not a man, so I have no idea what an actual wank session feels like (I can't believe I just said "wank session" in a review; especially a review of such a beautiful piece) but I do know what it's like to squeeze those drops of black pearls onto the page, and I imagine the release is just as sweet...The comparison is brilliant...and that question at the end; I've wondered that a few times, myself, but I'm usually way off base *laugh* Just another narcissist living in her own head ;-) But this is an extraordinary write, LA, seriously. Thank you so much for sharing this with us.

-kimmer

[LA Lorena]

LMAO! I can't believe that someone wrote "WANK SESSION" in a review of my work either! LOLOLOL. Usually get those comments in my inbox. ;)
Thank you for the nice words Kimmer, glad you found it worthy. I do like to try to experiment with my writing and always enjoy surprising my readers with something unexpected.

[Relic]

I love wank sessions myself.

[Richard🖌]

Well, Lorena,
If he writes anything like this, I'd not be a bit surprised to know he must be thinking of You, while he's at it, that is. ; )
Lovely and crafty innuendos thread so creatively all through this piece from your fertile imagination, Lorena … and, what's not to love about that, especially when one admires and worships excellent writing.

A bushel basket of thanks for the sheer joy of sharing with you! ⁓ Richard

Oddly, my fingers are calloused and work-weary …
100/100

[bindubabu]

whoa...beautiful! How well you have used metaphor...This poem just sucks you in and makes you read!

[Traci]

This is the first poem I have read of yours and my oh my did I choose a good one :)
I guess it is true what they say, poetry is open to interpretation and it seems we all are thinking quite alike....Kimmer summed it up, need I say more, LOL.

[Annabelle Lee]

Aha, wondering if possibly you could be the center of someone's creative world. Always, but then I realize that I'm only Annabelle and they needn't be paying enough attention to me for that to even be possible, lol bravo, Lorena

[Nicky Sarti]

Love love LOVE this!!!
Thanks for sharing it with us.

[Ken Simm.]

A metaphor shown with skill. It works and works well.

[B-poet]

Every great poet or writer always needs a true source of inspiration. If it's coming from a beautiful and talented woman (such as yourself) how can you go wrong with that. Great poem. An enjoyable and intriguing read. :)

[char]

Absolutely sexy. And they say writers are sexless nerds.

[LA Lorena]

S**t! You mean I'm not? ;)

Thanks for the read and the refreshingly candid review. loved it!

[char]

No, I've been called that. You proved them wrong. Doesn't exactly work in my favor though.

[LA Lorena]

Well then, time for you to prove them wrong yourself then, isn't it? Poetry need not be dull and stodgey, or sexless and nerdy. Go on, dive in to the deep end and live a little! :D

[The 13th Eros]

Every line is a breath of ultimate beauty; tender and intimate. What secrets you release in every lingering letter. He would be a fool not to think of you every waking moment. You are nirvana.

[Tree]

A great analogy. Really dug this poem, and it's rhythms and innuendo. In a good piece whether it's a novel or a poem the reader will find a way to squeeze themselves between the words. Well done, poetess.

[LA Lorena]

Thanks Diego. This one was written as an experiment, leaving the safety net of my rhyme, rythym and flow style, and grabbing hold of something completely different and out of the box. I'm very much enjoying expressing myself in this new way, and am getting comfortable in this skin.