The Home Coming Queen

No light fluffy Saturday fare. Sundays are for deep reflection. Plus, I am enjoying making you all think.

she checks her face in the mirror

adjusts herself, just so

her son comes home today

been away at college, he has

 

won't be long now

before he'll have his own

a wife and family

and she'll not have

his comforting presence

home for the holidays

 

bringing some friends too, he is

John, such a nice young lad

He'll do well, that one

but that other one?

She frowns....

His name escapes her

the mind does that when we age

cheeky monkey, that one

An odd look about him

and the way he's always whistling

the theme song to that movie

"The Graduate"

Insolent, he is

As if she doesn't know!

 

One last look in the mirror

to be certain

she pauses

looks round to be sure

she'll not be seen

purses her lips and blows

 

smiling now

she looks younger somehow

and it's comforting to know

that she still remembers

how to whistle

 

coo coo ca chew

 

 

Reviews

[David Scott]

You did build a reflection of illusions... The way so many lives end up I think. We look in the mirror and every line reminds us of a time, place, or person.. Every smile brings a song to the heart. Some songs fun and playfull, some sad and low. We know that time will teach lessons to us still and more to the young ones that will suckle a few lessons from our experience. Oh well, off to learn some more tunes to whistle and teach a few oldies but goodies to the youngsters as well.
Great poem. You should sleep well tonight. ha

[LA Lorena]

I hope so! Slept like hell last night and was up prowling by 2:30 AM.

[Michael G.]

Is this "two movies and a song day?" Cool! Count me in. This says many things, starting with the title.
Good write!

[Sheila Kline]

Ah, the title sets the stage for what is being planned and oh how skillful the "seducer" seems to be as she gets that "coo coo ca chew" whistle ready to bring the train car into the depot! This is great - will she really do it, or just dream about it as she thinks she retains this power? You write of a subject that is oft' off limits as we sit sipping tea and eating crumpets in our parlors, while in the bedroom reality is fabricated of one who wants to be ever young, and attractive. The cheeky monkey has hopefully learned how to keep his banana attached to the tree!!!.....lol
Excellent!

[LA Lorena]

thank you. I love to write about what is taboo, or off limits. There is just so much fodder to chose from out there. :)

[C.R.Turner]

So, she still doesn't know? ;)

[LA Lorena]

Oh, you are such an a*s C.R., albeit a damn lovable one!

[C.R.Turner]

Yes I have! :)

[LA Lorena]

You know we'll be demanding proof. ;)

[Joel M Frye]

...aren't you??

[LA Lorena]

aren't I what?

[Joel M Frye]

"You're trying to seduce me, Mrs. Robinson...aren't you?" You play a fine Anne Bancroft, LA. ;)

[LA Lorena]

Oh, sorry! a little slow this morning. I need another cup of coffee I think.

[LA Lorena]

just another idea that had been runnin round this head for several weeks, and decided to just go with it and see what popped out...this is it.

[Joel M Frye]

If you truly want to hear the sounds of silence...go check out hellopoetry.com. LOL

[LA Lorena]

LOL. So, start posting here again. Some of your friends miss you. Well, this one does, at any rate.

[DrD]

I enjoyed this very much, Mrs. Robinson . . . . ah, Lorena . . . . it's always nice to have fun with you. Oh, that didn't sound right, did it? Anyway, I liked your poem.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Oi go walk the f*****g dog!

[LA Lorena]

LMAO! I'm going! Need to tire him out so I can finish up my Christmas shopping today.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

No tire you out lol!

[Joel M Frye]

I could go many places on this train...none of them decent. ;)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You cradle snatcher. But why not if two people aspire and no harm is done!

[Frieda P]

You are THE cheeky monkey, no two ways about it. Made me smile, made me think, made me a wee bit melancholy...good read for an easy breezy Sunday. Nice work...

[LA Lorena]

when challenged, I rise up to it! ;)

[Frieda P]

You WAY surpassed my expectations! ;)

[Frieda P]

I will have to think of something else now. :-P

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"and here's to you, Mrs. Robinson"

this has sneaky undertones in it...

i like it very very much.


i really enjoy the play on words in the title also.

jacob

[LA Lorena]

;). Thanks Jacob. This idea has been "planted in my brain" the past few weeks, so I just went with it. I'm not 100% happy with it yet, but I will come back to it and tweak here and there.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we are often too close to our own work to be happy with it.

but i see no need to tweak this...as is...it reads perfectly in my eyes...

i think sometimes we overtweak.

jacob

[LA Lorena]

aww, thank you! :)

[LA Lorena]

I'm not usually a tweaker. I write with pen and paper, and usually tweak in my head and make a lot of chicken scratch. This one just spilled out directly on the keyboard in about 10 mintes, and I'm not sure if some of the tonal qualities are just right.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i too, write similarly...

like Frank O'Hara...the poems just spill out of me...i tweak as i go...and then usually just move on to the next one.

sometimes i go back and see something, and make a change or two...but mostly i let the poems do what they will...i feel like i am more a conduit than a poet.