Lilah

Here is an outlet for a personal issue of mine

Lilah, Lilah,
Oh rest dear, sweet child.
Your delicate soul swings through the air.

Lilah, Lilah
Your passion flows for miles,
Reaching out desperately,
to break through the most of my despair

Dearly forsaken,
Young, sweet soul
Your story had no chance
It is never to be told
forgive me for my action
I did not help to understand
What sorrow it would bring
To never hold your hand

Lilah, Lilah
I never made it clear
How much I truly loved you
to myself Or to my peers

Lilah, Lilah
Forgive me oh, sweet one
You're soul Is searching free
What I did to You
Brings even more pain to me.

Lilah, Lilah,
Oh Rest Dear, sweet Child.

Reviews

[Kaylee Mae]

This is beautifully tragic and wonderfully written. I wish more would-be mothers could have as much compassion as whoever this story was inspired by does.

[Chris]

This one touches on many levels... it would be unfair for me to assume but... that IS what people do.

[Relic]

I like the repetition involved. This is very good.

[Sami Khalil]

You delicate sou swings through the air. well penned.

[Alicia Beavis]

Such a sad, longing tone builds the foundation for this piece and it comes through strongly. The way you repeated her name was effective and never annoying (like it sometimes can be).

The third line in the first stanza made the whole piece for me! It was spectacularly crafted and painted such an interesting image in my mind. Even if the rest of the piece was rubbish (which it isn't), I wouldn't care because of that.

Very nicely written piece and such a pleasure to read you words.

[Renée]

Sweet ..Soulful Sorrow ..

[Everett DeValle]

A really deep write...I relate to it greatly suffering a loss many many years ago. Thank you for sharing a lovely poem with great emotions.

[~ Stefanie ~]

This was packed full of emotion and I loved it. Your style is beautiful and I throughly enjoyed taking the time to read this. Well done!

[Kyle]

This is well done! Emotional and so very sweet!

[alan khan]

ohh wow. this is really strong s**t.the style and flow was pretty good. but just the whole tone did it for me. awesome work. i liked it.