broken heart

broken trust and broken hearts... 

empty promises we bear... 

and now im done with your lies... 

youve broken me...

Reviews

[Harley Ann]

broken. we're all broken at some point in our lives, and this poem fits the sickening feeling very well. fantastic job

[Mason]

An Ellipsis is using --, ..., or * to indicate an omission or suppression of letter or words.

[Austin]

I can't top the other reviews, because I never even knew what an "ellipsis" was (I only called it the three dots), but I also thought it was a very good poem. Thank you for sharing this.

[Kaelyn Shea]

i hvae one short question. what is an ellipsis? lol now i feel like a ratard

[Mike Espinosa]

This is an interesting poem. It's short and to the point, and you capture the emotion well with only four lines to work with. The repetition of 'broken' used to three different objects is really cool as well. The lack of capitalization and punctuation (aside from the ellipsis) shows how little she can focus on 'proper' language. My only suggestion is to get rid of the ellipsis on every line, but that's because I see every break as a pause in reading. Good job.

[Mason]

The best gifts come in small packages. This is no gift, but a broken heart fits easier into a small box than a whole one does, doesn't it? I hope you find solace, and perhaps, new love.
Thanks for sharing! ^^

[Nathan Durham]

I liked this one. For such a little poem, this one packed some serious power in it. I can totally relate. Thanks for sharing this. :)

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Short and sweet.
It's great.