Choices

Life's to short

to live with regrets

Live everyday

as if it was your last

 

Looking in the mirror

stareing at myself

holding a gun in one hand

a knife in the other

 

Deciding on which to use

maybe both

maybe none

I just don't know

 

Life is full

of too many choices

which way to go

what road to take

 

Should I stay

or should I leave

Should I die

or should I live

 

Do I have a true love

or will I always be alone

will I ever be married

or will I never have a ring on my hand

 

I'm sick of choices

there's to many

my brain spins around

it's about had enough

 

I've done decided

what path to take

if I leave I'll be gone

but if I stay I might find happiness

 

So I'll stay

and be merry

if only for a moment

or for my life

Reviews

[ℰmerald ⚓]

Very well written, it is easy for the reader to instantly connect with the emotions and thoughts going through your head. This has good imagery and makes you think about your life and how you could make it better and stop having the thought of death as the only solution, makes you want to just slow down for a second and just live in the moment while it lasts. Good job.

[SouthernBelle]

thank you

[Icelanna]

I enjoyed this but you are missing one crucial thing - punctuation. Punctuation is expressive, use some question marks when you ask a question and exclaimatives what the bits get stressful. You need basic full stops and caesuras, otherwise it is just a constant stream, you'd have to read it all on one breath, which gives no emotion to it, just makes it a super rush. Don't forget the punctuation, when it's there I read it literally, if i have to pause I will, it gives you depth.
Love to you x

[Andrew (MJ) Nugteren]

i really loved it and i agree with you 100.000%.
i really love reading your work their inspiring and grate.
i enjoy your work, their full of emotions, good choices and more good things.
all i'm saying is i love it and keep your writing up

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

I really did enjoy reading this mostly because everyone can relate. It's most definitely a relatable piece. There are indeed, a lot of choices to choose from in our lives each and everyday. Sometimes they can be simple and at other times it's quite difficult to get through. In the end, we have to try to go with our gut and choose the right path into happiness. You done a splendid job expressing yourself with emotions that I sometimes question too.

Especially right here that I do relate:
"Do I have a true love
or will I always be alone
will I ever be married
or will I never have a ring on my hand"-Though, there should be a question punctuation mark along in there somewhere since there's many questions being asked. I did think the "will I" questions were too much in this stanza.

I did find other minor mistakes, if you don't mind me pointing out to you:

The first sentence changed to--Life's *too short

Second paragraph edited to--*staring at myself

Fifth stanza--there's too many "shoulds".

Seven stanza-On the last line of that stanza doesn't seem to fit well. Maybe it would sound better like this

*It's had about enough* You might've switched the words by accident.

Other than those small mistakes that won't take not even five minutes to edit if you decide to, it's really great and relatable! Look forward to reading more of your work in the future! :)

Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG ;)

[SouthernBelle]

thank you so much

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

You're quite welcome! :)