Losing you

We sit alone

in complete slience

 

Vacant coughs

fill the air

 

There's nothing to say

we just sit and stare

 

It's been hours

since we talked

 

We've fought for days

and now it's over

 

I've cried and cried

I want to die

 

We're slowly

falling apart

 

I keep trying to hold on

but you just let go

 

We go to bed

mad at each other

 

Crying myself to sleep

so sick of fighting

 

I'm slowly losing you

you're slipping away

 

Still in slience

nothing's moving

 

You can hear me cry

but you don't care

 

I wish things were normal

wish we could be happy

 

I love you

I need you

I miss you

 

You're slowly pulling away

and I'm fading away

 

Soon I'll be just a memory

a used-to-be

 

I'm losing you

I'm losing everything

 

You're leaving me here

crying and alone

 

I've lost you

so I've lost my love

Reviews

[Mia]

This is so insane! There fighting is not bad, the moment you stop fighting that's the scary part. When you don't care to fight, when your tears don't make him feel bad. That's the point of no return...you call me a b***h and I'll forgive you because I know I pushed you there...but I couldn't get past you not caring. And I suppose once you've stopped caring it never really comes back. The 'you' is said person :)
I loved that you didn't need to use emotion to get the feel through. The situation is powerful enough that simple words were effective. This is fantastic, sad but fantastic!

[SouthernBelle]

thank you so much

[Flo_writer]

Sad but true...this is a vivid creation on when things take a turn for the worst in relationships. Well told from start to finish. Great work here.

[SouthernBelle]

thank you so much

[That_Girl]

"we jsut sit and stare" *just

"nothings moving" *nothing's

This hits home. The feeling of utter devastation is shown profoundly. Nice.

[SouthernBelle]

thank you

[☢ZoMbIeS sLaYeR&#..]

i like it :) good write

-shelbs ^_^

[SouthernBelle]

thank you ^.^

[Muhammad Ibraheem]

mp :)

[Muhammad Ibraheem]

nice one :)
it touched my heart

[SouthernBelle]

thank you :)