Autumn

Walking down the streets

that are covered with fallen leaves

feeling the crisp Autumn air

feeling the cool wind hit my face

 

Kicking up the beautiful leaves

sitting by a fire

cuddling with a lover

wrapped up in a blanket

 

Sitting outside

looking at the stars

enjoying the weather

on the cool nights

 

On Saturday's

it's football time

watching Alabama football

is where I'll be found

 

On Saturday nights

it's me and my baby

cuddled up outside

with friends laughing and having fun

 

I love Autumn

the cool nights

and all the beautiful Fall colors

Reviews

[Anonymous/Anjaan ( Yash..]

nice one...

[SouthernBelle]

thanks

[Cerise]

Aww..i wish i could live those moments...they felt so wonderful...soo peaceful and relaxing..well done

[SouthernBelle]

thank you

[TheAdamBryant]

nice poem

[SouthernBelle]

thanks

[That_Guy]

Very relateable and beautiful imagery. Well done

[SouthernBelle]

thanks

[J. Viands]

Good job defining the season well written keep it up

[SouthernBelle]

thanks'

[Sakshi]

Very spontaneously written I think!
Good thoughts, but refining this poem will do wonders!!
The leaves, stars, football, you covered every aspect of Autumn.

Just correct your "blakent" and you're good to go :)
Also, if it was me, I would change
"enjoying the weather
on the cool nights"
to either - *in the cool nights* or *on a cool night*

Rest in your hands!
Thanks for sharing!
Cheers! :)

[Sarah G.]

It's a nice poem but the last part seemed more like a story that a poem. There are a few words which I would word differently, but all in all, it was a good attempt. I liked the theme of the poem.
-you spelled 'blanket' as 'blakent'.