My Soldier

I went to see you

get on the plane

I waited there till

it was out of site

 

I drove home

scared and nervous

fearing the worse

praying for the best

 

I get letters

and emails

I just wish I could see you

face to face

 

It's been a while

since i got anything

on the news

they say some soldiers are coming home

 

I see the time

and the date

I write it down

so I can go

 

Two weeks later

I go to see

If my prayers came true

to see if you really are home

 

I wait for everyone

to get off the plane

I see yours friends

I didn't see you

 

I ask them

"where you are"

they say

"I should talk to that man"

 

I walk over to where they pointed

I ask him about you

He stands up straight

and Salutes

 

He hands me something

its wrapped up

I unwrap it

It's your dog tags

 

I hit my knees

crying

He tells me there was a bomb

and there was nothing left

 

I put it on

hold it in my hand

read the name on it

and hold it near my heart

 

I see all the familys laughing and and happy

and i stand alone with no one

I knew I'd be alone

I knew you'd never come back

 

I'm in love with a soldier

forever till the end

He leaves in a couple years

And I'm afraid He won't come back

Reviews

[TheAdamBryant]

wow this poem made me cry a little , such a great poem

[SouthernBelle]

thanks

[Westminster Abbey]

Wow. I'm just glad my uncle made it out alive.

[SouthernBelle]

yea some ppl are lucky...

[Steven Cash]

I didn't need to read this... wow.. i will cry

[SouthernBelle]

im so sorry i didnt know :( i feel bad now

[Steven Cash]

Naw it's ok. Do'nt feel bad. I just had an Aunt in Afghanistan (not blood aunt, aunt by close fam friendship)

And I was just so concerned for her

Bunch of Military people in my fam actually... Granduncle was in WWII in fact
Grandfather in Korean WAr
cousin in the Navy
lots

[Steven Cash]

Aunt didn't die, thankfully

[SouthernBelle]

yea some people are lucky....

[Sakshi]

Hi,
Found this really touching.. and I could visualize it too...So great use of words..

one thing I noticed, which you have written :

I ask them
"where you are"
they say
"I should talk to that man"

Aren't, "....." supposed to contain active speech? I ain't sure about this, I ain't any critic myself, but if it was me, I would have written it as :

"Where is he?"
"You should talk to them"

cuz the "..." contains the part of speech which soldier's lover and the soldier's friends speak in a conversation, which is being directly quoted here (using "...." )

Well, that's just my thoughts :)

You are very expressive in this one! Bravo!

[Cerise]

Awww..that soo touching and amazingly written the whole story..it was beautiful..:)

[SouthernBelle]

Thank you