Clue

The night sky,

As i look up to the stars,

I get lost in what is wonder,

In what is beyond and far.

And there you are,

Reaching out to hold my hand,

With such a caring warmth,

That i fail to understand.

You're like a down pour of rain,

In a life time's drought,

Savored by the grain,

So calm yet peaceful.

You're like a waterfall,

On a vast tropical island,

So lively and free,

Bringing a smile to every face you see.

If only i could understand,

Why it is only ever kindness that you give,

Maybe i'd be happier,

In such a world that we live.

I'll search for an answer,

I'll search for a clue,

But until i find one,

Just like Christopher Columbus,

I'll sail the ocean blue.

Reviews

[Archia]

That was such a great read. I loved what it was saying the whole time throughout, and then I really loved what was being expressed in the last stanza, especially the last line, I loved the idea that brought. It's sweet as well, especially the beginning. Great poem.

[GreenIvy]

Thank you so much :)
I'm glad that you enjoyed my writing ^__^

[Aehr]

i love it! its kinda dreamy and it flows like water! the beginning was excellent! Well done!

[GreenIvy]

Thank you :)

[demureminds]

I love the similes in this and great job with the imagery as well! My favorite is the 3rd stanza, it's so well written. Great piece! (:

[GreenIvy]

Thank you :)

[Celestial Witch Child]

Love it. I feel the second to last line could be improved a bit. Perhaps "I'll be Christopher Columbus" or something like that. Great poem. (:

[KennaLovesJake]

It was amazing. I liked how it started. It caught my attention, and throughout the poem, it held my attention. The words were nice and sweet, and I liked them, but they didn't hold much rhythm in some parts because of the length of some sentences and because of the shortness of others. Try and make the lengths of each sentence in your poems closer next time. I really liked this one, though, especially how it ended: "I'll sail the ocean blue." That was my favorite part! :) Overall, this poem was wonderful, and I'll be looking forward to reading more in the future!

[GreenIvy]

Thank you and i see what you mean by the difference in the length of the sentences. I'll keep that in mind next time. (:

[Forever Hidden]

Truly amazing, GreenIvy!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!