The Flight of the Phoenix (Part 2)

 

The flight of the phoenix

(the part-2, characters)

The sky in a trance meets the earth

in this hour of waking up.

She wakes up to gather water,  

to bathe before too many eyes

lick honey at the public tap.

The tap for water opens its soul.

It springs to life and soused is her

morning. One discreet boy, the only

other presence, pretends not to see.

 

Radha, with her covert eyes glances

at some vague dreams, distant paths and

a man, man enough. Water giggles.

The boy picks up his flute to douse

the universe with a fountain

of tunes unmatched. World can be so

illustrative, if they, the mates

wear off the morning and defeat

destiny. © 2008 - All Rights Reserved Kushal Poddar

What happened to them! The next part will tell the story of love and first blood.

While traveling I disguised myself as a resident of the places I traveled. It had been hard for I had the marks of being a Bengali all over, so adopted a story of someone trying his luck at their provinces for job and a place to stay. It brought out results quite different. Those parts are safe and smooth like anywhere in the world if you have money and you are tourists, they respect tourists. But I wanted to know what a tourist won’t.    

Curious for more…

 

Reviews

[Ankhesen Mié]

"Water giggles."

Your wording is charming, amusing, and deeply clever. And your stanzas are filled with imagery and pensiveness. Case in point:

"The boy picks up his flute to douse
the universe with a fountain of tunes unmatched. World can be so
illustrative, if they, the mates
wear off the morning and defeat
destiny."

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Very clever write. I enjoyed this.

[Lyrical Love]

Water giggles.
The boy picks up his flute to douse the universe with a fountain of tunes unmatched.
World can be soillustrative,
if they, the mateswear off the morning and defeat destiny.
Lovely words that(though clumsily) somehow stumble into greatness.

[Helena]

"The sky in a trance meets the earth in this hour of waking up."

Lovely opening line for this next part of your amazing write.
Wonderful description throughout, unique lines....and I also
loved the end part too...

Very good job my friend!

Helena

[alternative_be]

"The tap for water opens its soul. It springs to life and soused is her morning. One discreet boy, the only other presence, pretends not to see."

This is so romantic! I like the idea of the water tap having a soul, feeding the girl's spirits and the image of the discrete (I think you made a typo) boy pretending not to see...

"Water giggles. The boy picks up his flute to douse the universe with a fountain of tunes unmatched."
That is the nicest and most creative description of water I have ever seen ... Very inspiring also the boy!

Yes, I am curious, I want to read more!
For the rest, I agree with Ankhesen Mi� and please keep surprising us with your creativity!

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

oh man, I'm reading backwards, so I'm a little confused, I see that you disguised yourself,
it reminds me of another read, where another individual did such thing, in odd ways, anyhoot, will read, part 1, :P --mishy

[JudyC]

...Water giggles.
The boy picks up his flute to douse
the universe with a fountain
of tunes unmatched.

Once again, I love the descriptive imagery in your writing. The poem draws me in by involving all the senses, and leaves me wanting to know what happens next. Great!

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Ah! You left me again with the curiosity for more and for the next part!
I here agree with Siddartha that the scene even reminded me of jungle book, may be because as far as I remember there also the girl's name was Radha.
Writing, as usual is awesome...with a brilliant imagery!
Great flow!

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Definitely curious for more. This scene reminds me of the girl and boy in the story 'The Jungle Book' - the maiden at the fountain for some reason. Quite stunning. Thanks once again.
Light,
Siddartha

[PianoandPage]

you have a talent for exploding out new associations and ideas. love it.

"water giggles". - i think this just killed me. :)

and the boy playing fountains of melodies. *sigh*

thank you for writing and sharing.