Insomnia

" to them who knew sadness is in their blood"

 

Insomnia

The true word of sadness is

a lonely streak of water

falling out of a tap.

On a metal pot.

An insomniac moon stares

through an incredible window.

Watching people with

its pale-ice disconnection,

is a habit grown.

 

A night bird flows over the face.

A collage of sounds.

Search the source and find the soul.

 

Open the net,

Server is down.

Face the reality again.

This is you alright, ten fingers,

one of the nails is cracked.

Cracked is the glass on the door

of the delusion-world of sleep.

Sadness profound, profound sadness …

Reviews

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

Excellent! I've nver been an insomniac, but you def gave me a dip into what it feels like. Plus, I have known many who are, and it's probably very hard.

The metaphors are sharp, it reads like a novel actually. I can't really pick one part I liked, because the whole thing was amazing. I feel it was.

Kena

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Brilliant work. I know what its like to be an insomniac. I especially liked the "insomniac moon" part. Excellent.

[DeeWV]

A most interesting read. I have never thought of insomnia being sad ( clever parallel) nor as the
moon being an insomniac ( another clever image) amost unique poem. Well done.

DeeWV

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Nicely done. Captures the essence and surreal nature of living in a world without sleep and the strange myriad of thoughts that pop through a tired person's being and mind. Thank you for sharing your talent.
Light,
Siddartha

[Emily B]

Exquisitely done. I've missed your words, friend.

[A.r. Bazian]

almost perfect, almost ... me!
whats added, only the drifting that takes place in my hear... it takes me down!
oh the echoes of broken melodies and memories from times ago, added the thoughts, the wishes and the wonders!
what i dont, as we all dont, understand!
its in depth!