rape of a housemaid

Rape of a housemaid              

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Shadow is touching the tower.

Her way to home is through the park

Butterflied stretches of verdant.

Teasing loneliness taking nap…

Her way back is a length without

Any of the daily clatters.

So they, the assassins of her

Are not known to her consciousness. 

 

Butterflies fly evenly calm

Over an assault, resting in

An innocent green of South Park.

Sun flows with dark blood till birds sleep.

Wake up, humanity alive

Within the uterus of life!  

 

Reviews

[CarrieLynn {Chameleon A..]

you did a wonderful job of taking a heavy-duty subject and putting to such a tune of careful words. Great Write!

[lori c]

you take a serious topic and write about it so tenderly. the second stanza really captured my attention. as if creation is mourning over the injury of one of its own. a whispered ending . i like it.

[R J Askew]

I prefer the other poem of your which I read earlier, A Game Of Chess. I think the other one is a strong poem all round. I know this one is about a serious subject, but the wording of the other poem works harder on me. But then I am very interested in chess and the nastiness of humanity is... o I don't know what.

[Cece]

i read this many times
to think on the depth
i'm far too new
to accept just a hint

i was looking for the much
more direct approach
but even with assault
there is new life

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

well crafted, this probably one of your best.


Great Write.

[JC Fox]

I agree it is subtle, it also reminds me of Atonement.

[Blue Bard]

The thing about this one is its subtlety. You bring a horrible act out in an understated manner, yet the way you approach it seems like an affront to the very creation. Salute on another good one.

[George Love]

A very well crafted work.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Ah! The ending is quite tragic and sad actually :(

An amazing write!

[Legion]

Predators everywhere. Even in the mundane. Words crafted together nicely. Good write.