a fire atop the tower

 

A fire atop the tower

(Janet Louise -  )

Utter those magical screams at our souls,

Echoes of it knocking around the walls.

A towering monument to pretend

You can die away easily without

Saying bye to the rest of them left here.

Whisper of the hand to push you over

Is just another of those satanic

Days, filled with love seeking its sacrifice.

Let your hair fly in your face with the gust

Of gutsy air daring to touch dreams.

Like a dog returns to the dry death’s place

Of an offspring lost, your memory comes

To haunt the delicate spot where it hurts.

The tower lightens itself with the fire

Of eyes and a distant sunset… blue dies.

You step down amid another life’s days.

 

 

Reviews

[The Archangel Gabriel]

Very nice... very nice. When will the Satanic days finally be over. I am far beyond ready!

-Gabe

[T. R. Writer]

In all honesty, this took my breath away. I have few words to say. Reminds me of the scene in "Child of God" when the house is on fire... that scene, like this one, is so sad and beautiful at the same time.

[deadlife]

all i can say now is........... WOW!

[E. M. Murren]

Fine work. This piece rings out. I love the line, "You step down amid another life's days." It brought the work home gracefully. I like this a lot.

[JC Fox]

I agree another wonderful write

[Steffi]

again another great write with really nicely done vivid imagery
I look forward to reading more of your work
You imagery is refreshing and creative and i enjoy reading it
:D

[R J Askew]

'Utter' and 'whisper' catch my ear, as do 'just another' and 'let your hair fly in your face'. And I can see a mangy old dog sniffing around and sense the delicate spot, which offers a great contrast to the dog. The distant sunset and death of blue suggest an end and the stepping down seems like a relief. How an I doing?! Hmm, the fact you mention a woman's name makes me wonder if this, especially, reading the last line is a farewell. Is 'another life's' a reference to the lady? Also as this may be a withdrawal from love poem, is the tower the hope of love? Or even -- 'Fire atop the tower' -- a physical reference? I enjoy your poems as you make me think. If everything was obvious I would be bored.

[Cylis Derrens]

Interesting images, very vivid.

[CarrieLynn {Chameleon A..]

wow...great write! :)

[Cece]

everyone knows its hell
when the towers are to burn
the lofty can become such hell
this brings tears to my eyes