hotel sea view

Hotel sea view

 

A long walk up the wet sand

Sun on the grains and

Salt in the sky and water.

Hands in the long pockets  

Flare the nostrils.

Air breaths salt. Fresh catches and

Dried sweats in a mingle box.

Smiling offers to

Take you to touch waves of sea

A hotel room of chaos,

Tousled apparels,

And a long face at the end.

A tour of love and quarrels.

 

Reviews

[CarrieLynn {Chameleon A..]

great write! :)

[Catrinka]

Great powerful imagery - I love poems that transport me to places and feelings - a dose of reality wrapped up in a package with a bow. Good work!

[Cece]

or maybe this a memory
of vacation chaos
nothing more

i remember many a quarrel
while on vacation
and the hotel stink

the sea coast smells
added to the stink
the maids could not cover

[Rain]

A hotel room of chaos,
Tousled apparels,
And a long face at the end.
A tour of love and quarrels.

This was a cool piece. It is an honest view of life and love by the sea. The sea is romantic, but it is a place where life unfolds, also. Great write. Rain..

[None]

I think sometimes close quarters and one bathroom to share can do that to people! I enjoyed this so much. I was thinking at the beginning it was all about the water but you had a hidden story inside. Excellent imagery and wording!

[Cece]

the walk in the wet sand
seems to be easier than in the dry
yet in Pilipinas the walk in the wet
is just as hard as the walk in the dry

as it seems your walk was just as hard
yet the walk is best taken
than not taking a walk at all
ooops did i cliche mmmm

wonderful image i think i got it

[JC Fox]

I always love your poems, they always make me feel good. Great job

[E. M. Murren]

You do write such beautiful imagery. This is no exception. Really lovely piece to read. Thank you.

[lori c]

again with the ocean imagery, i am such a sucker for those. this reminds me of every time i have vacationed seaside -- and i always love it. so what's not to love here. you call me back to those wondrously devilish escapes with your words. excellent.

[A.r. Bazian]

i can draw the whole picture up.... either in my head or on paper all together! nice imagery!
nice work!
keep up the good stuff!