look up at the sky

look up at the sky

 

This time of the afternoon

She has to jump down

From her verandah.

Each and every day.

A fatal cloud on the sun.

 

Her doctor reminds her of

The lovely husband,

The small love island,

The pet named Henry.

 Still her sun sets early

 

On a mossy verandah.

That was made before

Her father was born.

Each and every day.

A fatal cloud on the sun.

 

Lady, look up at the sky…

 

Reviews

[Leah Maldonado]

wow...this is so beautiful...

its got that melancoly feeling captured so perfectly..
A fatal cloud on the sun.
great line

and the ending too, it was very seet and thats what spinned into being a little happy along with the whole sad things who had going on in the beginning ish.

really likes this
Leah

[E. M. Murren]

You offer the reader a peaceful experience in every work I have read. It is wonderful. This is no exception. Really well done.

[PhoeniX]

not too sure how to say this but.... this some how was magical. though it had a hint of saddness. it was still quite intriguing.

[EdFutinski]

you're talented,great poem

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Very nice and beautiful piece.
Great imagination and superb use of few words at right places.
Awesomely awesome :)

[CarrieLynn {Chameleon A..]

the imagery is wonderful in this piece...great write! :)

[None]

A story within the beautiful poem! This speaks for itself with the loveliness of your precious words.