the scar

Scar

 

 

A flaw down a valley of

Human soul.

I am talking on the scar,

The blemish,

Down the left chin of the girl.

Observe it,

Be curious but touch it

And a stream

A flood of rainy river

Will take you

To the land of violent

Dark conducts.

 The teeth of animal past

The call of

Demon to enjoy bloodless

Blood on hand…

See the scar down her left chin

And wait till

She obliterates beyond

Memories.      

Reviews

[Touché Armada]

Such a different write, and interesting, a story on a story, a written story in a scar, I dont know anyone who cant remember what each scar resulted from, but its something intimate to know of the scars of another person I think, almost like being show a private diary sometimes.

[Legion]

Sounds especially dark. I love it. Scars make us who we are (the physical and the emotional). Good work.

[George Love]

Behind each scar a memory. Deeply insightful work

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"And a stream
A flood of rainy river
Will take you
To the land of violent
Dark conducts.
The teeth of animal past" .... it is a great skill to pick and craft your words like this. "See the scar down her left chin and wait til she obliterates beyond memories." - tears! This is really deep and rending poetry. I like this a lot. Best wishes, Pammy.

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Vivid imagery - scars are so telling and yet so mysterious. A wonderful thing to ponder. Great write. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha

[T. R. Writer]

Creative... great use of imagination. I wonder what you saw or were thinking of that made you write this one.

[CarrieLynn {Chameleon A..]

great write! :)