the scar

Scar

 

 

A flaw down a valley of

Human soul.

I am talking on the scar,

The blemish,

Down the left chin of the girl.

Observe it,

Be curious but touch it

And a stream

A flood of rainy river

Will take you

To the land of violent

Dark conducts.

 The teeth of animal past

The call of

Demon to enjoy bloodless

Blood on hand…

See the scar down her left chin

And wait till

She obliterates beyond

Memories.      

Reviews

[justjenn_2u]

Very engrossing. How hard to endure such pain. I was referred to read some of your work by karlklein. Your power of words is amazing.

[Lady Of Darkness]

wow, a very dark write. Love your use of words for this piece.
Well done.

[deepoet]

Emotional and passionate!

[The Archangel Gabriel]

Poddarkushal-

I have been struggling with your reviewws for some time. You always make me think so drammed hard with your words - that is a good thing, and I like having to work at it.

"To the land of violent
Dark conducts.
The teeth of animal past"

Well said! "The teeth of animal past." How intriguing!

It has been a privilege to get to learn from you, especially how to tighten up my own work and go more minimalist. I have an annoying tendency to write long discertations as if I am applying for a PhD...

Great write!

-Gabe

[Emily B]

Amazing, the imagerly you used. I felt like I could reach her. Although unable to help her. This is so starkly beautiful.

[Azaradelle]

A very powerful piece.

Yrs.

Azaradelle.

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

I really enjoyed this one. Lots of emotion within. Wonderfully written.


Great Write
Rayne

[PhoeniX]

hmm...very mystifying if i might say. it put me through many different feelings while i read this. by all means it was good! it made me feel even with what it going on with me right now. thank you for sending this my way!

[JC Fox]

This was a great write there was so much feeling and passion behind it great job!