an immortal winter

 

 

 

 

 

He, cursed the winter, a fatal angel,

 

The long winter made the sun placid

Shackled hands of trees were

                              Bound to the mellow blue.

Our roadside crazy-man

Yawned and cursed You.

 Grinned the slow ice,

It was easy to entice

The dirty and old crazy-man.

We passed him

We smiled with triviality or with

      Pity.

He smiled back

And, please lower your eyes

     Because, his smile was beyond everything.

But

He cursed the winter

And, the snow.

We knew: why

When we saw a crazy smile on cursing lips

                                   Frozen to the immortality

Reviews

[Rain]

This poem I read three times. It is somewhat of a mystery, if I try to overcomplicate..so I stopped. For me to like something, I must feel something after I've read it..and this I did. I will not even try to delve in to secret meanings. I feel this is a powerful poem. Rain..

[waywithwords]

Well done for coming fifth my friend. I just knew that you would be pretty high up with this awesome poem. Anne.xxx

[waywithwords]

Wow! Poetry in motion my friend. Brilliant imagery again in this poem with, yawened, cursed, pity and grinned. Excellent and hope that you are first placed. smiles.xxx

[The Archangel Gabriel]

poddarkushal-

I really dig this one.

"When we saw a crazy smile on cursing lips
Frozen to the immortality"

That is so interesting. You have a gift with words, my brother.

-Gabe

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

The poem is also a bit of a mystery to me .. i take meanings as i see them so what i get may not be what you wrote about ..
An old man a young man .. immortality .. winter , death.. this is what i get ..
The old man cursing the winter as he has not long ..a fatal angel.. lovely lines and descriptions ..
A very unique poem ..

Chloe
xoxo

[Brenda Sue]

Wonderfully written.

[Diana Owen Busy with Li..]

this is an awesome poem. I so loved it.