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eye's green as the sea, they seem to look inside of me
beyond the mask the monster takes, to see a man who's filled with ache
not of the body, nor the mind, but of his heart forever blind.

the man, she knows is not a man, but a soul forever damned.
loneliness has filled his heart, as she see's it rip and tear him apart.
touched by what she see's, her heart begins to fill with need.
"why?" she asks, a silent plead.
 "does no one know this mans in need.."

the man, he knows she's their, as he looks up at her and stares
does no one know the weight he bares? see's the chains of fate he wears?
a man thats not truly a man at all, who'll never know the sound of heavens call.
Hell is all he knows of life, his heart constantly filled with strife.
looking at the girl again, he see's her pureness deep within
his body filling with the all familiar need, he drops his head in silent recede.

she runs over to his side, begging him not to resign.
"i'll be your light" she says "to fill the darkest place inside your heart."
taken by surprise the man looks into her eyes, eyes a deep sea green.
he smiles at her, as he takes her hand in his.
"i'll love you into the end of time, let the whole world know that you are mine"

hand in hand they walk the land, from the roman cathedrals to the Egyptian sand.
time cease to exist, as they walked the world in eternal bliss. 
decades they seem to pass, and soon they too became the land.
as they died together, hand in hand.

                           

Reviews

[theking]

Wow. Bravo. Such beautiful imagery, the sensory connection I felt with this poem was off the charts, and it was just a pleasure to read it! Now, onto some of my feedback/critique. I found this "poem" to lack some poem like qualities, like a consistent rhyming scheme and it didn't seem to have a melodic quality to it that I like to see in the poetry I read.

The general, first impression I got from this was it seemed to be a cross between a fiction novel and a poem, which I actually really liked! I can see it being listed under poem, but that's not really what I got from it. I got more of a poetic fantasy, if you can understand the distinction I am making. I know, I'm having trouble clearly expressing my thought process :I

Anyways, I loved it. Gorgeous writing, and as its time for me to hit the hay, a great way to top off my day. Such a good poem, such strong imagery. Great job with this one. I look forward to reading more of your work :)

Keep up the good work, and rate my review if you found it helpful!