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              There always is a light in the darkness I know this, and for many years I have lived by this hope alone. The darkness always is around me but the light keeps me alive at least till now. The light is now fading, there is no reason to stick around, its not like anyone is going to miss me. No one cares, they can't see what they are doing to me. What he is doing to me.

               Splashing agaisnt the cold white tiles, my tears dripping down my face. Closing my eyes feel more tears quickly excaping my eye lids. I pick up the blade, my only relief that I feel, the only way to stop the acking. Gasping in pain as I slash my leg open, only the leg never the wrist. I don't want people to know, they will take away my relief. My blood is flowing now, its going everywhere, covering the nice clean white, turning it crinsom red.

                    Its going every where, so much, so much of my life leaving me. Looking at my feet, they are moving funny, they are spinning? looking around to see the room spining, oh no there is too much blood! I cut too deep! I'm going to die, I don't want to die. I try to scream but all i can get out is a gargling gasp. Sitting there feeling my heart beat starting to slow down, getting so tired, I can't help it but my eye lids start to go down.

Reviews

[theladygraceling]

This is pretty good. It's very deep and emotional and a little bit dark. I agree with TLK that there are a few typos and you should look over the writing and correct it because seeing a typo kind of ruins the emotion (I think you wrote "acking" instead of "aching). Also, give it a title because that really makes the story more eye-catching.

[TLK]

A number of typos, e.g. "Splashing agaisnt" and a rogue 'its' when you mean 'it's'.