Broken Glass

5/7/2012

I like the sound

Of glass hitting the floor.

The sound of the broken vase

As I carelessly throw it out the door.

 

Because it reminds me…

It reminds me that I’m not the only

Broken thing in this world.

It reminds me that

Just because I’m shattered,

I’m not alone.

 

It gives me hope.

 

Where I find true hope,

Is in the potter.

The vase I threw out the door,

It had to have been made

By someone right?

And that someone must have cared.

 

They put their time,

Their sweat,

Maybe even their blood,

Into creating it.

But the greatest thing,

They put their love into making it.

 

It was a piece of dirt,

Or more accurately a lump of clay.

But the potter,

He saw so much more.

He saw beauty,

When all else saw dirt.

So he molded it,

Into something of worth.

 

He crafted this lump of clay,

Into a beautiful work of art.

Simply because he loved it,

With ALL of his heart.

 

I destroyed what was created,

But can it not be fixed?

If dirt can become beauty,

Can broken beauty be repaired?

 

If I return the shattered vase

To the creator,

Will he care?

He could fix it.

So cannot my creator

Pull me out of my despair?

 

I like the sound,

Of Glass hitting the floor,

Because it reminds me,

That even if I’m completely shattered,

I can be healed.

It reminds me that

My brokenness isn’t life.

It reminds me that

There is so much more

Than the broken glass on my floor.

 

Reviews

[Maya]

I love this poem and how deep it is... my favorite line is
"Because it reminds me…
It reminds me that I’m not the only
Broken thing in this world.
It reminds me that
Just because I’m shattered,
I’m not alone.

It gives me hope."
its so perfect, I think its something that everyone thats felt broken has felt while they begin their slow journey out of the dark and its such a beautiful thing to realize. This is such a great poem(:

[Kupendwa]

Thank you so much (:

[Trigorin]

Nice piece, and there's a very sharp element to this, which I think is what you were going for. If I had to criticize something, I'd say there were a few lines that just fell flat for me, specifically line 17 - it seems too unsure and questioning, compared to the rest of the piece. Either way, very, very well done.

[Kupendwa]

Thank you so much for the review. I wrote this a while back and decided to throw it up here. I'm glad you appreciated it. I do see what you mean about line 17. Thank you again.