My Dream

My Dream

“Dad! Look at what I’ve done.”

His tiny arms extended out to my direction 

Supplying me with sketch. 

It did not look sophisticated

But I could tell he did his best.

“Do you like it Dad? It’s you and Mom.”

My eyes glanced but could not see

A blurred sun with a blue sky

Two stick figures were outlined

I looked at him but his face was turned

He wore a cap, his hair was short

It all looked familiar, like déjà vu

Son, this is the first time I meet you

All of a sudden it came to me 

The blurred images were just a dream

I pictured a perfect life

I had a son, I had a wife

Reality is obscure

My dreams the images are so pure

I want to sleep and not wake up

I wish this existence 

Just cease to be

Reviews

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Very good, there is much feeling in it, love and sorrow. Well done. I enjoyed reading it.

[ksscampos]

Thank you. That means a lot coming from you.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

My pleasure. :)

Rudi

[Brittany Zedalis]

╰☆╮We all want that happy ending. Great work.╰☆╮

[Richard D. McGehee]

The loss of this poor soul goes deep, I truly hope he wakes from his sleep. Job well done!

[tmasse]

wow, i can assume this is about a man who lost his family, it is a tugger at the heartstrings

[A. Amos]

My friend wordman brought me here and first thanks goes to him, for introducing me to talented fellow writer...this was deep and interesting!

Will be back to read more of your work, all the best in the world if writing.

[ksscampos]

Thank you very much.. it really means a lot to me.

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome!

[Nikki]

Very nice, I saw it the right opposite of wordman below. I thought that it showed the ache the writer had to fast forward to the bliss ahead. There's something worth looking forward to so badly that he just feels like he simply cannot wait. I feel a picket fence lines the yard in the future. :) If you just close your eyes you might catch glimpse. Lovely.

[ksscampos]

Thank you Nikki.. and its true, i feel if i had continued writing a picket fence would've come to play.. thanks for the comment..

[Nikki]

lol :) You're welcome. Glad to hear it, I'll just plug it into my imagination for this gentleman anyhow. :)

[wordman]

a sad write filled with dim views of life and disappointment

[ksscampos]

Sometimes we wish our lives would have taken a different path. And we wonder how things would've turned out. ..

[wordman]

we all wonder especially as we get older because we see all the things we were told is true
but we wouldn`t be who we are today and again maybe it was planned that way

[ksscampos]

Thanks for your feedback.. it really means a lot.. makes me want to keep writing

[wordman]

well you are a writer poetry sites sometime get lonely but if you comment on a poem a day you will get a lot of feedback and friends every body likes comments and we feel left out at times
were all on the same ship

[ksscampos]

Very true.. my family and friends doesn't know i write poetry, so my only audience is here.

[wordman]

poetry is a great outlet for emotions we hide from others and sometimes from our selves send aamos and tate morgan with a friend req