A Quiet Soul

never underestimate the feelings of a quiet person.

A Quiet Soul

As it comes up inundating my being

My body drowns in the incarcerated hate

Struggling with compulsions that itches the core

Tying a knot making the throat sore

Nerve impulses satisfy the desire

Swinging my extremities

Inflicting onto the world my personal despairs

 

Eyes tinted with the color of disgust

Misjudged force with no set course

Vicious energy from my chest erupts

What once laid dormant

Idiopathically emerges through unreasonable violence

 

A quiet soul with a dangerous mind

Hate and sorrow boils inside

Many voices consume my rational yell

My subconscious; my self declared hell

 

I glance onward

Merely anchoring on an inconvenient hope

The heat of the lava that spills from my eyes

Burn with it all the anger and deception I store inside

 

When the lava cools, new lands will commence

With it a new life I will embrace

Bury with it the agonizing hate

This quiet soul will retain

Its peace of mind once again

Reviews

[Country Girl47]

I really like how you wrote this poem. Could feel the emotions. Ty for sharing.

[Ma'at]

i really like this. your word choice is great, and the title throws the reader off about what is going to be read, which is clever. you put a lot of thought and emotion into it and it completely works x

[ksscampos]

thanks for reading it! emotion is what drives us to write right? thanks again!

[AprilRN1210]

wow.... this is INTENSE!... I read the title and was expecting one thing, and then you knocked it out of the park with something else entirely. oh my goodness!... the phrasing and flow were powerful, but the imagery and emotion were affecting... what a combo!.. my favorite I have read of yours so far!... saving this one for later!.. love the warning... it is scary what goes on behind the eyes of those who look "normal" and seem "quiet"... working on a psych facility and in the ER has taught me, looks are definitely deceiving.. awesome writing:)

[Lola_Bee]

Intense, kept me gripping till the end, to see the conclusion, awesome!

[Nikki]

I just got shivers, no kidding. I swear this is something that I feel so very close to.. I can't explain it, it's like you and I were one at one point and severed when I was about 16.. and my mind changed dramatically, though not going to lie... i still have my moments.. It's eerie.. but, I am in love. This made my mind drool like the mouth does for food. Just.. Wow.. >.>
And a gold star.

[ksscampos]

Wow... your comment made me blush. Thank you, i am glad that you were able to connect and have it speak to you like you say. It makes me feel good knowing my words touches someone in such ways..

[Nikki]

Aww :) That's so sweet. You're very welcome. Indeed, words are so very powerful.. You wield them well my friend. :)

[wordman]

this is a lot of emotion to carry around you painted a vivid picture

[tmasse]

good vocabulary, consider playing around with eliminating some minor words to see if it flows better

[tmasse]

hate and sorrow boils inside or hate and sorrows boil inside

[periwinkle]

This is a good poem! The words are great! :)