Gone

A little Girl moves away

The little girl twirled in her beautiful dress, watching the sequins sparkle in the bright light overhead.

She had never been happier.

She didn’t know why everyone was crying around her.

She was seeing the pain on her mothers’ face and knowing she will be okay despite the tears.

She looked into her fathers’ eyes and saw the tears that were trying to break through his stoicism.

She felt nothing but love, security, and warmth.

The pain and cold from moments earlier a distant memory.

She saw the man in the corner who had always been there unnoticed.

He smiled back at her.

“Are you almost ready to go?” He asked.

Smiling, she took his hand and closed her eyes letting the warmth and light engulf her.

 

 

The Mother held her baby tight, crying so much her daughters’ hair was wet.

A pain gripping in her chest as she watched her daughter struggle to take breath.

If only she hadn’t left the gate open. It was only for a minute.

She knew not to go out the front yard on her own.

He should have been driving slower. Stupid learner.

We should have installed that fence around the yard last summer when we discussed it.

If only we didn’t remove that tree. He wouldn’t have been able to get so far up the yard.

She was being so well behaved playing with her toys on the lawn.

How will this hole in my heart ever be filled again?

How will I know love again?

Why?

Why my baby?

The mother struggled for breath through the sobs.

Her heart feeling as though it was taken away from her.

Gone.

 

 

 

Reviews

[Franky]

I like the emotion and original story ideas. I wanted to read more. Please add. You should include a picture with the write as that would add power to your words.

[Krys]

Thank you.
For now i am just doing short stores that come to me as i type, but i may in the future expand on them.

[Franky]

Good imagination !

[Krys]

Thank you. I appreciate your feedback

[EJ's Horror]

You're getting there, Krys, you know how to captivate an audience, maybe try and add a bit of detail as in what's going on, other than that it is beautiful

[Krys]

Thank you i appreciate you comments.
I only wrote my first short story yesterday so i am always welcome to criticisms.
I will take your comments into consideration for next time.
Thank you.

[EJ's Horror]

Really? You take me as you've had a bit of expirence. I read your other one and it blew me away.

[Krys]

I saw that, Thank you.
I a usually turn to more hands on things to express my creativity (knitting, sewing etc) but i have always felt there was a story in me to get out an jsut didnt know where to start.
You have given me to confidence to write more and express myself in other ways.
Thank you.

[EJ's Horror]

No worries, Krys, I hope to see more of your writings :)