A Dream of You and Me

A short scribble about dreaming, the Sea and that special person. Photo by me.

By the sea I had a dream,
A dream of you and me.
Salt, tears, joy,
Light on top of bottomless depth.
Free, free and unafraid like the creatures of the ocean;
I swim with them, unknowing.
I dream of them, undisturbed, belonging.
Waking, silver gleam of a mermaid's tail is all that remains.
Sun kissing on my forehead,
In my mind the residue of another world lies like afternoon haze,
Above the horizon
Pink, golden
The world is there, there by the sea
Where I had a dream,
A dream of you and me.

Author's Note

What do you think? All comments are welcome :)

Reviews

[Stuck on you]

Just perfect! It seems like you read my mind. :)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

The lines describe a lively scene...as a reader...you take us into a world of a couple and resonate that with the theme of the sea and the reflections that garners the atmosphere here in your words...I do feel the mood...but in some lines the catch to overtly use "dream" takes from this verse...I would also short some lines to better give the flow of this piece...as an example:

By the sea I had a dream,
A dream of you and me.
Salt, tears, joy,
Light on top of bottomless depth.
Free, free and unafraid like the creatures of the ocean;
I swim with them, unknowing.
I dream of them, undisturbed, belonging.
Waking, silver gleam of a mermaid's tail is all that remains.
Sun kissing on my forehead,
In my mind the residue of another world lies like afternoon haze,
Above the horizon
Pink, golden
The world is there, there by the sea
Where I had a dream,
A dream of you and me.

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By the sea
I had a dream,
Of you and me.
Salt, tears, joy,
Light on top
Of bottomless depth.
Free, free and unafraid
Like the creatures
Of the ocean;
I swim with them, unknowing.
I dream of them, undisturbed.
Belonging,
Waking,
Silver gleam of a mermaid's tail
Is all that remains.
Sun kissing on my forehead,
In my mind
The residue of another world
Lies like afternoon haze,
Above the horizon
Pink, golden
The world is there,
There by the sea
Where I had a dream,
Of you and me.

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Of course, this is just a quick edit and example...but I believe you'll see what I'm saying in the lines above...good day...

[littlepoetdreamer]

Hi Glen,
Thanks so much for that! I really appreciate it :)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

You're welcome...

[Michael G.]

I once stood on many a deck and viewed the view you showed in your photograph. And I had the same dreams and thoughts, also . . . though not as poetic as yours. Good write!

[littlepoetdreamer]

Hi Michael, thanks so much for you kind words - really encouraging! :)