A Tale To Die For

Continuation of A Tale To Tell in poem form.

Pray for me upon mount Zion,

Taken to a never-place.

See me dance with dandelions,

But I still need your grace.

 

Live for me for I have lost,

Light a candle if you care.

I know not what the future holds,

But wish I could be there.

 

Seven seconds left to keep,

Seven forevers to spare.

Whispers too soft to comprehend,

But loud enough to hear.

 

Time has kept you next to me,

But now I must depart.

So many dreams left unsaid,

Nor knowing where to start.

 

Forgive me all my enemies,

For I know my pain won’t last.

Remember me with inner eulogies,

And trinkets from the past.

 

 

 

For forever,

For forever gone.

Not forgotten but forlorn.

Reviews

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beautiful yet sad. I really enjoyed this piece and glad to see another islander on this site. Good write

[Mya Q]

My heart is crying. Lovely. Nice to see a fellow Trini write poetry of the quality.

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

Thanks a lot. I'll definitely be checking you out as well.

[Nisreen]

Sounds like you are speaking from another space and time
its a time travel piece
the words you use can work for past, present and future

its marvelous

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

Thanks a lot for your thoughts. As far as the meaning, i won't say what it is about cause my work is open to interpretations and is based on individual experiences.

[Lyn Anderson]

Some lovely writing here, with beautiful rhythm. The last stanza stands by itself -- I would perhaps consider changing the font to reflect its difference, and consider saying forever IS forever gone -- but only you know exactly what you intend.

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

Thanks a lot for the review and for the suggestions but i meant that i would be gone forever.
Your words are appreciated though.

[Lyn Anderson]

I did understand that, however if you prefer for forever gone, it is of course, always best left with the author.

[jimecuador]

This is a very sad piece. I hope that he finds happiness somehow.