Washed Up Words

Trying to pour myself out the only way I know how.

You’re an unwritten letter,

Sent on a wingless dove.

Floating lost at sea,

Sinking without me.

 

Are you the strength that pulls me under?

Calling me to the depths.

A bittersweet profanity,

That suffers me to breathe.

 

Let me be that inner spasm,

That curves your lips into a smile.

Let me rewrite your tragic story,

Come and taste the wild.

 

Forgive me from drowning,

Save my life once more.

Guilt washes to my lungs,

Like the waves sweep the shore.

 

Breathe into my broken heart,

And bring me back to life.

Bathe me in your wonder,

Of warfare without strife.

 

 

CPR just to kiss you,

CPR just to hold you near.

Must I stop breathing to touch you?

Must I stop breathing to keep you here?

 

Don’t let me drown.

 

Don’t let me drown.

Author's Note

Be brutal.

Reviews

[Bibliophile-Tipsy]

This is so Beautifully written
" That curve Your lips into smile "
One of the Most Beautiful stanza of Poem
That Really makes me smile (:

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

Thanks a lot for your thoughts.

[Amy R]

quite beautiful and heart touching!
another amazing write!!
well done.

[Zachary E. Tenney]

I think this powerfully conveys a sense of desperate love, a love that the character in the poem would do anything to fulfill. I interpret it as being about this: The character in the poem is completely in love with someone, someone who he isn't able to see or speak to-possibly someone he's never even met. He or she is thinking about how much they would do to finally come in contact with the person they're in love with, how they might even go so far as to die just so that person would notice them. Great work, well-written with some interesting imagery and good word choice.

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

Thanks so much. I'm so glad you enjoyed this.

[Jennifer Shaw]

"Let me be that inner spasm,
That curves your lips into a smile.
Let me rewrite your tragic story,
Come and taste the wild."

My, my, you never cease to amaze. That stanza is so beautiful to me. I feel that way about my darling friend. I think I always will...

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

Thanks a lot. Im so glad u liked it nd can relate.

[Isabella Disney]

Wow... Made my eyes water. Truly touching. So beautiful. Such powerful metaphors!

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

Thanks so much. U have no idea how much it means to me.

[Jennie Baron]

This poem shows an exquisite poetic voice, great flow, apt imagery and skilled word choices. That's as brutal as I can be! I really like this one, Kristan.

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

THANKS SO MUCH JENNIE.

[Ilerah]

I enjoyed it, its well written, and a good poem. I have no idea why, but I kinda find it inspiring also. Good job Kristan.

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

Thanks a lot. Im so glad u enjoyed this.

[Ilerah]

Glad to review.