Haunted

Who is the real ghost?

He died,

Not too long ago,

It happened so fast,

He didn’t know.

‘Till a stranger took his home.

 

She was a pretty little thing,

Who dreamed of believing,

In anything again.

Anything worth retrieving.

 

All alone in her world,

And alone in his place,

With no one to hold,

She couldn’t see his face.

 

On her darkest of days,

He watched her cry.

Tell me you love me.

But ever denied.

He tried to comfort her,

But she passed him by.

 

Trying every way,

To make himself known,

As the curtains were blown,

His despair was shown.

 

Trying in vain,

To tell her he was there,

He drove her away,

And made her scared.

 

Soon she did leave,

She had sense to believe,

In all the things,

She couldn’t perceive.

 

Haunted by loneliness,

And a ghost of her face,

He can’t cross over,

To a better place.

Author's Note

Tell me what you think.

Reviews

[Zachary E. Tenney]

A beautiful poem that really resonated with my own emotions. It reminded me of times in my own life when I, like the man in the poem, was desperately trying to make my presence felt and to prove my worth to the world. And the message about spiritual death was relevant to my life also. Great work!

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

Thank you so much. I'm so glad that you can relate to my words.

[Jennifer Shaw]

Oh my! This conveys a beautiful sadness. I feel this is more about spiritual death rather than physical. I feel as though both parties are ghosts of their former selves. This is a wonderful, sad piece. It actually hurt to read it. (In a good way, oddly)

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

Thanks a lot. You totally got the true meaning of it. It wasn't actual death. Thanks a bunch for understanding.

[Brian]

It's got so much going on. Especially the battle it feels like. There's something there, a searching and a clashing, and in the end the result is that the battle was never won. Over what exactly, hard to say, perhaps the demons we all hide? Hide behind our own faces..

Either way, I really enjoyed your rhythm, pacing, and tones.

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

Thanks a lot. U really got where i was coming from.

[Brian]

Awesome! Glad to relate! Keep writing.