Elisa

Dedicated to a very close friend of mine.

Elisa

"Ever felt like you need someone to define you?"

                                                                                       -Elisa Hamilton

She sings to me through words I can’t believe,

Songs of better days and things I can’t perceive.

Blue feathers fall from up above like raining kites,

She tells me to stay strong,

But she can’t take her own advice.

 

Pull with me to cut the endless rope,

The noose that sways you breaks to give you hope.

 

You’re pineapple-shaped bubble deep under the sea,

Your wingless angel told me you wish to be free.

 

I see into your soul though I can’t see your face,

I hear your voice through words from lines you’ve left untraced.

 

Let my words wash over you.

Define you.

Reviews

[Tessa Melendez]

Powerful though short. Interesting that you color-coded your stanzas though, I don't quite know why you did so. As always, the word choice and figurative language is elegant and beautiful. Great job!

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

As always, it's good to hear from you. And do accept my appreciation.

[Zachary E. Tenney]

Short and sweet, and beautifully written. Good job on this one Kristan!

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

Thanks a bunch.

[Chirag Kumar]

A sweet and simple poem. Absolutely amazing :)

[anne]

beauty, make one feel so nice..

[Alisa Js]

Aloha,

This one is a sweet and tender love song from one heart to another.

Very nice.

Alisa 💫

[Melinda McQueen]

Beautiful poem, beautifully written. Elsa much be someone special.

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

Thanks a lot. i rally appreciate your words.

[nazia]

The love, the warmth is just dripping from every word of it. I am stunned by the force of love that you display here my friend. A write truly from an honest heart :)

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

Thanks a lot. Everyone would be surprised ti know that Elisa is just a very good friend.

[nazia]

I don't know about everyone but I am ;)
Elisa is one lucky person

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

She's a very special friend.

[Lydia Shutter]

Oh my....the warmth in every line of this poem is so very lovely! Not sure I liked the changing color of the font, but the imagery is stunning. My favorite lines are "You’re pineapple-shaped bubble deep under the sea,
Your wingless angel told me you wish to be free." Words can be such a comfort. You obviously care for her....deeply. Enchantingly emotional. Lydi**

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

Thanks a lot lydi. You have no idea how much it means.

[Nate]

Its Was Just beautiful. Amazing. I'm in love with your style of writing.. Undoubtedly I'll remember it for long time and it will be one of my favourite for sure...

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

Thank you so much. I'm glad you liked it.

[Miss Sharon]

This is a hauntingly emotional write and I feel there is more going on "between the lines" than the words perhaps convey. A very interesting write Kristan! ~Sharon

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

Thank you Sharon. It means a lot.